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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 06:44, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Picking this one up, review coming as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 06:44, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

Early career[edit]

  • Link Brentford in the first paragraph.

Brentford[edit]

  • Is the EFL Trophy ever referred to as the "League Trophy"? I would suggest using the full "Football League Trophy".
    • Done, Football League Trophy is better.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Legge continued to retain his first-team status throughout the 2010–11 season and scored four goals against Exeter City, Tranmere Rovers and Charlton Athletic", no obvious source for this?
  • Same potential issue with the League Trophy title again.
  • "would progress their way", this sentence reads a little oddly I feel. Even dropping their way would improve it.

Gillingham[edit]

  • Link loan to Loan (sports).
  • Ref 31 could be moved to the end of the following sentence as it would cover both and the second is currently missing a ref.
  • Carlisle United already linked in the previous section.
  • "and earning himself a place", the use of himself here could probably be dropped as we already have him immediately before it.

Cambridge United[edit]

  • "thumping of Hartlepool United", thumping is too journalistic.

Port Vale[edit]

  • "he said that the club in an altogether better place", something missing here.

Honours[edit]

  • No ref for the Lewes trophy.
    • I removed it as a new source says his stint there was not a success.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References[edit]

  • There are a few references I can't access as they appear to be either dead or moved. Can we try and rescue as many of these as possible?
  • Avoid shouting in ref titles, per WP:ALLCAPS. So ref 10 and 14 can be dropped down.
  • Not a massive issue, but some refs link BBC Sport and some don't. It's not a requirement, but it would be good to have some consistency.
  • Ref 47 uses only BBC compared to rest including Sport.
  • Ref 64 has not title or publisher.
  • Is the Football Lab a reliable source?
    • I've reworded that line.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

A few points I picked out on an initial run through. Placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 12:02, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • I've addressed those points and changed a few things around, added a little bit. Thanks.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    A couple of minor points from a second look through
  • "extend his deal at the club.[41] However he left the club", the double use of club is a little repetitive here.
  • "He went on the make enough appearances", doesn't quite work.
  • That's probably about it, once these two little things are addressed. Kosack (talk) 18:27, 13 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    • Okay I've addressed those two. Thanks again.--EchetusXe 12:08, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    Happy to promote. Nice work. Kosack (talk) 06:49, 15 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]