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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 21:42, 26 April 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 21:42, 26 April 2023 (UTC)
Images are appropriately licensed. Earwig finds no issues; sources are reliable.
"Leroy Chollet and his siblings, who were one-eighth black, could be subject to racial segregation laws in The South": suggest lower case "the South". And presumably Oliva Olinde's mother was only half black if Leroy was one-eighth black?
- Yeah, I made that more confusing than it needed to be. ( https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Leroy_Chollet&diff=1151936232&oldid=1151934998 )
Suggest linking Loyola Wolf Pack.
- Good idea!
Done
- Good idea!
"Loyola fell behind 30–21 until Chollet and team captain John Casteix led the Wolf Pack on a late-game scoring run": "until" isn't the right connector here. Perhaps "Loyola fell behind 30–21, at which point Chollet and team captain John Casteix led the Wolf Pack on a late-game scoring run"?
Done
"After Hillary chose Tulane, the family's genealogy came under increased scrutiny": you don't say that they were found to be partly black; the narrative jumps to them being run out of town.
- I've added some details. I introduced another source for this. ( https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Leroy_Chollet&diff=1151936232&oldid=1151934998 )
"In the NBA, Chollet was a reserve guard tasked with facilitating": what is "facilitating"?
- I've added a connecting sentence to clarify the basketball term.
We have his death date; do we have anything about his later life? I've found his obit on newspapers.com and will post some links later.
- I've added in some material about his later life, his ABL time, his Canisius record, etc, and looked through the sources that you posted below. Thanks for prodding me here. I think this fleshing this stuff out really improves the article. Regards, Rjjiii (talk) 05:50, 28 April 2023 (UTC)
I'll do spotchecks next. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 00:01, 27 April 2023 (UTC)
- It looks like you have newspaper.com access, so rather than clip these I'll just post links:
- -- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 01:29, 27 April 2023 (UTC)
Spotchecks -- footnote numbers refer to this version:
FN 4 cites "The brothers excelled at sports, and Leroy Chollet led the basketball team to consecutive state titles." Can you quote the supporting text? I don't have access to the source.- FN 16 cites "Chollet was inducted into the Canisius Hall of Fame in 1964": verified.
FN 19 cites 'Syracuse was one of the league's smallest markets. Players said that the State Fair Coliseum, the team's home venue, would get so "smoky you often had real trouble seeing through the haze."' I would tweak this a bit as only one player said this.FN 13 cites "In their final game, Loyola defeated Pepperdine University with Chollet scoring a game-high eighteen points." Can you quote this also?
-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 01:51, 27 April 2023 (UTC)
- FN 4:
A 1943 graduate of of New Orleans Holy Cross School, Chollet led his alma mater to three city prepleague championships, as well as back-to-back state titles his junior and senior years. In one of those state tournaments, he averaged more than sixteen points a game, tops in Louisiana in those days.
- Update: I realized that nowhere in this article do I mention Al Chollet doing well at sports, so I've added a second page number. From the quote beneath a photo of Holy Cross:
"Leroy Chollet and his brothers were prep school basketball stars."
- Update: I realized that nowhere in this article do I mention Al Chollet doing well at sports, so I've added a second page number. From the quote beneath a photo of Holy Cross:
- FN 19: Good catch, thanks.
- FN 13: I've replaced the newspaper.com news article with one from KC. This has the same material as the New Orleans paper quoted by Vargas. You (and future editors) should be able to verify this more easily. Some quotes from Vargas:
Chollet torched Pepperdine for eighteen points. He had five field goals and drew enough fouls from Pepperdine's defenders to hit eight free throws. Hultberg chipped in with nine points, Bonck and Casteix each had [7] points, Whittaker and Waldrep both had three points and Gurievsky managed two points. [...] Loyola had triumphed, 49-36. [...] a group of first-time participants had taken the tournament. [...] Finally the Wolf Pack received the Maude A. Naismith trophy.
Let me know if you need the full expanded quote or if that's good.
- FN 4:
- Rjjiii (talk) 04:16, 27 April 2023 (UTC)
I took a look at the first few points and the source check. I'll go through the rest of it soon and can ping you when I'm feeling done. I appreciate the sources for his later life. I'll take some time to expand that. Thanks, Rjjiii (talk) 04:33, 27 April 2023 (UTC)
I think I've responded to the issues that you uncovered. In the next few days, I'll look over the article a bit more.
I have a question or maybe just an uncertainty if you don't mind. I've put a stats section in the article with what stats are available. Based on a recommendation from the college hoops wikiproject ( https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia_talk:WikiProject_College_Basketball#Statistics_section_expectation ), I checked out Mikan's stats section for an example. There are no sources for Mikan, but all of his stats are available on one site (basketball-reference.com). Chollet's stats are coming from that site for Syracuse and two college seasons. The ABL stats are from statscrew.com. One Canisius season is from the college. And his Loyola stats are extrapolated from his totals in Appendix I of Vargas (2013): 26/30 games, 132 FG, 62 FT, 326 PTS, and no attempts data. Since every other line is using a different source do I need to indicate this somehow? I don't think it's something sports articles do, but it seems strange not to attribute the data.
Regards, Rjjiii (talk) 05:50, 28 April 2023 (UTC)
- You know, I hadn't really looked at the stats section yet, so I'm glad you mentioned this. Editors handle this in a couple of different ways. The easiest thing to do is probably to add the relevant sources to the subsection headings, "Professional" and "College". If more than one is needed for that section, just add multiple footnotes at that point. The other way is to add a column at the end of the table, with the heading "Source", and put the footnotes in that, on the rows that they apply to. By the way, FN 28 doesn't link to the reference when you click on "Vargas 2012" -- I think it should be 2013, not 2012. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 10:21, 28 April 2023 (UTC)
- I've just gone through and struck everything above. Once you've figured out how you want to cite the stats section, I can promote this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 13:11, 28 April 2023 (UTC)
- @Mike Christie: I've added bundled citations at the top of each table. (Making a column of citations looked confusing next to the other numerical columns, and putting it in the heading also put the superscript into the ToC.) The 2012 typo is fixed. All changes: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Leroy_Chollet&diff=1152345446&oldid=1152099839 Rjjiii (talk) 17:39, 29 April 2023 (UTC)
- That works. Passing; congratulations! Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 17:49, 29 April 2023 (UTC)
- @Mike Christie: I've added bundled citations at the top of each table. (Making a column of citations looked confusing next to the other numerical columns, and putting it in the heading also put the superscript into the ToC.) The 2012 typo is fixed. All changes: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Leroy_Chollet&diff=1152345446&oldid=1152099839 Rjjiii (talk) 17:39, 29 April 2023 (UTC)
- I've just gone through and struck everything above. Once you've figured out how you want to cite the stats section, I can promote this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 13:11, 28 April 2023 (UTC)