Talk:Leslie H. Martin/GA1
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 07:24, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
The article is in good shape. I have a few queries/comments:
- He is referred to as a "Higher Education Advisor" in the lead, but there is no reference to that title in the body. Is this meant to describe a generic role or is it a title of a position? If the former, it should probably be in lower case, if the latter, some mention of it in the body is necessary.
Deleted. (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
- "Higher Education" in the lead should be lower case and linked
DE-capped. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
- link Australian Atomic Energy Commission in the lead
- suggest linking PhD to Doctor of Philosophy
- drop the initial cap from Xenon, and mention that it is a chemical element, as it would not be commonly known to science numpties like me
- drop the initial cap from Quantum
- drop the initial cap from Military
- RAAF in full at first mention
- HE should be He
- "as best as his limited"
Really? Done anyway. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
- was he involved in the 3 MeV betatron? It isn't clear.
- Nor is the source, which says "In 1945 Lasich and Riddiford started building a 3 MeV betatron. This was converted to an 18 MeV electron synchrotron in 1948 when Muirhead and Wright joined the group. In 1962, shortly after Martin had left, a new 35 MeV Siemens betatron was obtained and was used by Spicer, Muirhead and Thompson for photonuclear work until 1986." But it's certainly an important piece of equipment acquired on his watch. (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
- CSIRO in full at first mention
Another organisation better known by its initials. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:08, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
- link fellow
- should it be "included as the Defence Scientific Adviser"?
- drop the initial cap of Chairman
- state where the Totem tests were done
- link Australian Atomic Energy Commission at first mention in the body
- "from August 1959"
- drop initial caps on Editorial Council
- you could just use Duntroon and ADFA in the section about the prize (if you introduced the ADFA acronym when it is first mentioned
That's me done. The image is not free but has a good FUR. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:05, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
- This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, and is illustrated by an image with an acceptable FUR. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 18 June 2017 (UTC)