Talk:Li Jiawei/GA1
GA Review[edit]
- Lead
- I would mention she was born in China very early on. It's not apparent why she moved to Singapore from Beijing otherwise. Potentially "Li Jiawei is a Chinese-born, Singaporean table tennis player"
- Fixed: I had initially put this in the article but it was removed by another editor. I'll reinsert it and see what happens. — Cheers, JackLee 05:45, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- "The medal comes 48 years after Tan Howe Liang won the country's first and only medal to date, a silver in weightlifting at the 1960 Summer Olympics in Rome." Needs rewording since no longer the only medal.
- Fixed. — Cheers, JackLee 05:45, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- 2008 Olympic games
- It seems extremely long in comparison with the rest of her career. I would suggest this section is very WP:RECENTIST. E.g. these details don't seem necessary
- "At the Beijing Olympics, table tennis team events are played in a best-of-five-matches format. Teams play two single matches followed by a doubles match. If there is no winner after these matches, the teams play a fourth singles match, and if necessary a rubber match to determine the winning team."
- Comment: Before I started expanding this article I wasn't at all clear about how a team tournament works, and I thought that a little background for readers in my position was helpful. — Cheers, JackLee 05:45, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- Scores
- Who the coaches and teammates are.
- "At the Beijing Olympics, table tennis team events are played in a best-of-five-matches format. Teams play two single matches followed by a doubles match. If there is no winner after these matches, the teams play a fourth singles match, and if necessary a rubber match to determine the winning team."
- This section should match the rest of the article. Either expand previous tournaments or trim this one.
- Comment: I admit that this subsection does seem a little too detailed when compared to the rest of the article. Then again, I do note that "Wikipedia:Recentism" is an essay rather than a guideline. Let me see what I can do. — Cheers, JackLee 05:45, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- OK, fixed. Hope the edits I've made are sufficient. — Cheers, JackLee 06:38, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- Medals
- Wow. It's bigger than the rest of the article. Not sure that's a bad thing or not.
- Comment: This seems to be because table tennis players play in a lot of tournaments every year, and she has achieved medals in quite a number of them. Li Jiawei's biography page on the Beijing 2008 website even has a note to the effect that the list of her medals is incomplete due to space constraints. — Cheers, JackLee 05:45, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- General
- Numerals and units need a non-breaking space per WP:MOSNUM.
- Comment: I've checked; there don't seem to be any. — Cheers, JackLee 05:45, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
I'll put it on hold for the time being, but I would suggest a bit of work is needed to balance the article up. I'm also concerned about the size of the lead. Although it just about matches the WP:LEAD guidelines, the medals table, which is obviously list format, takes up a lot of the size. Peanut4 (talk) 23:34, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
- Hello again. Wow, you're pretty active when it comes to GA reviews! Thanks for taking the time. — Cheers, JackLee –talk– 05:45, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- Good idea. There'll probably be something to say about her progress in the singles tournament. — Cheers, JackLee –talk– 18:21, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
- OK, have finished updating the article. — Cheers, JackLee –talk– 17:04, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No problems, despite her recent Olympic involvement
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Everything looks fine. Good luck with future improvement of the article and any expansion. Peanut4 (talk) 00:52, 25 August 2008 (UTC)