Talk:Lice (The Office)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 15:40, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The rest of the office, on behalf of advice courtesy ..." well, not everyone. As you later note some of the people go downstairs. Reword.
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Pam tells Meredith how hard she realizes it is to handle children by herself." -- You should note Meredith has children, it isn't mentioned in the series very often.
Added.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Darryl had recently broken up with Val (Ameenah Kaplan) because he wanted to have a new start if he moved to Philadelphia." -- Two points of context needed here. First, you should note Val is the Foreman of the warehouse and that they had been dating, also note why he would be moving to Philadelphia.
Both have now been clarified.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Also, I believe Erin and Pete had some screen time which merits a mention, since it's a story arc they've been building.
Added a little bit.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The is the third episode to not feature Andy or Clark." -- link to characters, please.
Fixed. Clark doesn't have a link, though.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" In addition, The Office was the highest-rated NBC television program." -- of the day, I assume?
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"... he was particularly pleased with the humorous jokes that the episode contained." -- Humorous jokes seems redundant. Also, were there any specific jokes mentioned?
Reworded. The review is mostly just a recap.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The ending graph in the "reviews" section needs a citation for the final few sentences.
Whoops! Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Dup links tool shows one result: Kate Flannery
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Dab links tool shows no problems. All external links appear to be working. All images appear to be properly licensed.

Will await your responses. —Ed!^(talk) 15:54, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Great work. Passing GA. —Ed!^(talk) 10:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]