Talk:Light on Yoga/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 22:27, 14 October 2019 (UTC)

Opening statement

In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use  Done,  Fixed,  Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or  Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 22:27, 14 October 2019 (UTC)

This was almost a Quick Pass from me, but I think there are some additions to be made to the article. They are detailed below. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 22:27, 14 October 2019 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on, and for the kind words. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:42, 15 October 2019 (UTC)

Broadness and prose

• Could you discuss what yoga is in "Context"?

Somewhat like trying to define Jazz...  Done

• What language was the book first published in? I assume English, but the article doesn't tell me.

Yes.  Done

• Move The yoga scholar Mark Singleton [...] into the first paragraph of "Reception".

Moved and merged with his other comments. Or we can mention him both under Illustrations and under Reception, as you like.  Done

• The yoga teacher Bernie Gourley [...] This sentence is golden as a transition from praise for the book to criticism of it.

Thank you.

GA progress

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

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