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GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 17:06, 03 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 17:06, 03 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

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  • Looks good; I usually have to add suggestions for the infobox!

Lead

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Paragraph 1

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  • You used "in" three times in the first sentence; could you replace with different words to end any repetition?

Paragraph 2

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  • What is the Greenwood Valley? You mention it, but in the way it sounds like the reader should already know what that is
  • Please provide a link for "Pennsylvania Route 42"
  • Done.
  • Again, you used "in" three times in the third to last sentence; anyway to replace these words?
  • Done.

Paragraph 3

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  • What is an "Exceptional Value Stream"?
  • Plus, should "Exceptional Value Stream" be in all CAPS?
  • Reword the last sentence to be "Little Fishing Creek contains parts that are suitable to canoe on." Does that sound any better?
  • Reworded.

Course

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Paragraph 1

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  • Nothing here; great work!

Paragraph 2

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  • There's no link for Columbia County here; care to add one?
  • Okay.

Paragraph 3

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  • This is way too short; please just take it and add it to the previous paragraph

Tributaries

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  • You use "of" three times in this sentence couldn't "of the Little..." but switched into "on the Little..."? Let me know what you think...
  • Reworded, but not in that way.

Hydrology

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  • The last two paragraphs (sentences) of this section should be added elsewhere because it looks like a list; WP is not a list
  • Some paras merged, which is I guess what you're suggesting.

Geography and geology

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  • Once again, could some of the the statements in this section be added to other paragraphs? I'm sure they could
  • Done.
  • Otherwise, another good section! :)

Watershed

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Paragraph 1

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  • The link for "quadrangle" should be used in its first mention; it is currently used in its second mention
  • I'm aware of it, and it's a tricky problem to solve. If I do what you suggest, then there are two links immediately adjacent to each other, which I'm pretty sure is also frowned upon. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Paragraph 2

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  • Reword to "The watershed of Little Fishing Creek is long compared to its width", removing "fairly"
  • Reworded, but not in that way.

Paragraph 4

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  • Remove the link to "Pennsylvania Route 42"
  • Done, but not sure exactly why.
  • Remove the link to "Sullivan County"
  • Likewise.

History, industries, and etymology

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Paragraph 1

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  • "on August 2, 1979. Its identifier in the..." → "on August 2, 1979; its identifier in the..."
  • Why? Neither sentence is overly short, and that makes it a one sentence paragraph, which is also frowned upon.

Paragraph 3

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  • Is the inclusion of the links for all of the bridges really necessary?

Biology

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  • Again, please try to combine some of the statements in this section because they are too short and look like part of a list
  • Done.

Recreation

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  • Looks good! ;)

End of GA Review:

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Looks like a very good article and surprising interesting. I would prefer that parts of the article be combined so it doesn't look like a list. I will put this article on hold for seven days. Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 00:48, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Thanks, I've responded to all of your comments. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Jakec: After reading the text again it makes sense. Thanks for your edits! Carbrera (talk) 20:50, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 22:57, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]