Talk:Lord Nelson-class battleship/GA1
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 03:32, 11 July 2019 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:
- suggest "The Lord Nelson class consisted of a pair of pre-dreadnought battleships"
- weren't Goeben and Breslau German-crewed Turkish ships at this point?
- Not certain about the crewing situation, but I certainly need to use their Turkish names
- suggest stating where the the ships would be breaking out from, after "from breaking out into the Mediterranean"
- the actual attempted breakout was the Battle of Imbros, wasn't it? link, and change to January 1918, not mid-1918?
- Good catch
- suggest "Pioneering naval gunnery developments by Captain..."
- "able to use the drydocks" if that is what is meant?
- "of the preceding King Edward VII class would be required."
- "10-inch (254 mm) guns proposed"
- the length and beam conversions don't match between the body and infobox
- the deep load displacement doesn't match between the body and infobox
- suggest lk=on for the power in the body to link kW
- the 3-pounder guns don't match between the body and infobox
- you could drop the 12 in conversions in the infobox after the guns, except for the barbette armour upper range, also the second 8 in one
- I've always left the duplicates in the armor section as it looks funny to me if they're not all consistently converted
- suggest "as the waterline belt being submerged at deep load"
- "then a-building to all her "?
- I think Vice-Admiral should be decapped, as it is not a title of a person
- Indeed
- suggest "and she participated in the
Ooccupation" - it would be helpful to have something that indicated where File:HMS Lord Nelson 1906 midel section-EN.svg gets its info from. BTW, this is the best diagram of ship armour I've ever seen in an article, very informative.
- There's an equivalent diagram in Dreadnought. My sources only cover actual armour thicknesses; I have no idea where the info on hull plate and bulkheads thicknesses came from. I'm hoping that won't be a real problem whenever I send this up to ACR.
- it might do, generally we need sources for maps and diagrams AFAIK. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:01, 17 July 2019 (UTC)
- There's an equivalent diagram in Dreadnought. My sources only cover actual armour thicknesses; I have no idea where the info on hull plate and bulkheads thicknesses came from. I'm hoping that won't be a real problem whenever I send this up to ACR.
- the other pics are fine.
- ship breaking is overlinked in the lead, amidships and vice-admiral in the body
- Sigh, I'd have sworn that I ran the duplink checker before I nominated this one!
Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:48, 11 July 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for your usual thorough review. I hope that all of my fixes work for you.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:53, 17 July 2019 (UTC)
- No worries. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:01, 17 July 2019 (UTC)