Talk:Ludwig Augustinsson

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Hi, I will be reviewing this against the GA criteria as part of a GAN sweep. I'll leave some comments soon. JAGUAR  17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Checking against the GA criteria[edit]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
    The lead contains too many choppy sentences and should be merged into two paragraphs
    "Augustinsson have ended up being club champion once" - reads awkwardly
    "He was notable throughout the youth years" - his
    "against rivals Brøndby back in year 2000" - the year 2000
    "even though playing less than half of the games" - broken
    "The cup win was his second title of his career and his first for the club" - needs a citation
    "after winning the 2015 UEFA European Under-21 Championship, Augustinsson stayed in Denmark and played his first complete season for Copenhagen." - this is unsourced
    "He has made 19 caps for Sweden U21 since 2012 and is still eligible to play for the team. His biggest success came for the U21-team, when they manage to qualify to the 2015 UEFA European Under-21 Championship and later win the tournament, whilst being a key player in Håkan Ericson's squad." - this too is unsourced
    "2016–" section could be renamed to "2016–present"
    "Together with his good friends and former teammates from his time in Brommapojkarna" - informal
    "He is a lifelong supporter of Manchester United and dreams of playing for the club one day" - this too sounds informal and like it was directly pulled out from somewhere?
    The Personal life section's prose should be merged into two paragraphs
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    No original research found.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
    NPOV
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

This article contains some broken English and confusing sentences, but I think it stands a chance of meeting the GA criteria if all of the issues are addressed. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days. Please let me know if you have any questions JAGUAR  12:50, 27 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have tried to address some of the issue mentioned in 1. I think we can do this, @Psemmler:. :-) Robby.is.on (talk) 13:25, 27 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
First of, I'm super appreciated of the feedback. This is my first real Wikipedia article and I've written everything by myself, except for some needed grammer improvements by @Robby.is.on: later on. The only sentence that isn't mine is "Defensively Copenhagen only conceded goals in six games, with many experts claiming that he was one of the best players of the spring season", which I honestly don't have any sources to, so that line we can delete.

Second of all, all the sources is very reliable, I've sourced mostly from the biggest papers from England, Denmark aswell as Sweden.

Point by point during "It is reasonable well written"

  • "The lead contains too many choppy sentences and should be merged into two paragraphs" – Agreed. Thank you Robby for merging the paragraphs.
  • ""Augustinsson have ended up being club champion once" - reads awkwardly" – How so?
  • ""He was notable throughout the youth years" - his" – fixed.
  • ""against rivals Brøndby back in year 2000" - the year 2000" – fixed.
  • ""even though playing less than half of the games" - broken" – Agree it's a bit wierd line, how would you improve it, I would love for suggestions. It's a needed fact in my opinion.
  • "The cup win was his second title of his career and his first for the club" - needs a citation – How so? It's well cited that he won his first title with IFK Göteborg, and that he won this cup, which would make it his second. It's well linked to other Wikipedia articles and it's well written for the reader to understand it is his second title, wouldn't need a source to point out a fact that's been well sourced throughout the article in my opinion.
  • "after winning the 2015 UEFA European Under-21 Championship, Augustinsson stayed in Denmark and played his first complete season for Copenhagen." - this is unsourced – Same stand as the one above. It's well sourced and explained that he joined Copenhagen for 4.5 years in the middle of the 2014/15 season, making the 2015/16 season his complete season for the club. I feel this is very unnecessarily to add another source to.
  • "He has made 19 caps for Sweden U21 since 2012 and is still eligible to play for the team. His biggest success came for the U21-team, when they manage to qualify to the 2015 UEFA European Under-21 Championship and later win the tournament, whilst being a key player in Håkan Ericson's squad." - this too is unsourced"" – Agree I should find better sourced than just Soccerway to point out his number of U21-games, but when I do, it should be enough. Him being a key player is well explained by sources stating he played all of the games, scoring in penalty shootout and also being named in the team of the tournement.
  • " "2016–" section could be renamed to "2016–present"" – done.
  • " "Together with his good friends and former teammates from his time in Brommapojkarna" - informal" – Would glady take suggestions to improve this. It's well known him, Tibbling and Guidetti has been friends throughout school and youth years at Brommapojkarna, making it extra special they were all playing and winning the 2015 UEFA European Under-21 Championship.
  • ""He is a lifelong supporter of Manchester United and dreams of playing for the club one day" - this too sounds informal and like it was directly pulled out from somewhere?" – He has explained in mutiple interviews, especially the one I cited, that he has been a supprot to Man United for as long as he remembers, and that he would love and dreams of playing for the club one day. Of course in Swedish.
  • The Personal life section's prose should be merged into two paragraphs – I really agree on that one. Any suggestions which parts that should be linked with eachother, I've had problem seeing a red threads in the different paragraphs and making it possible for merging them without it looking too wierd.

// Psemmler (talk) 17:27, 27 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the responses, Psemmler! I've read through the article again and I've determined that it now meets the GA criteria. Anything that was previously unclear has been clarified, and I'm satisfied that all of statements that I found confusing have been cleared up too. I think the "Augustinsson have ended up being club champion once" sentence should have a "has" instead of "have", but I won't let that stop this from passing. JAGUAR  17:43, 28 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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