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Nominator: Bremps (talk · contribs) 21:39, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a. (reference section):
- b. (citations to reliable sources):
- c. (OR):
- d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a. (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a. (major aspects):
- b. (focused):
- a. (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/fail:
- Pass/fail:
(Criteria marked are unassessed)
You have been waiting too long for this, so I will review now of course! --K. Peake 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- The infobox release date may be of the song on the album, but this still needs to be sourced in the body
- Not done you need to list the exact release date in the body for it to be properly sourced --K. Peake 18:18, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- Remove jazz and rhythm and blues from the genres since these are only sourced as elements
- Remove full-stop at the end of the length
- Audio sample should be in the body instead with info added to the text
- The lead is too short; information needs to be added about the composition, more on lyrics and reception too
- Not done Clearly a lack of comp info and not much more about lyrics, couldn't you expand reception too? --K. Peake 18:18, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- "The song is inspired by" → "The song was inspired by" and shouldn't the name of the story be surrounded by speech marks?
- "Described as Dao's "comeback anthem"," should be re-worded as something to make it more clear that this was after he produced little for a decade
- Not done I don't think direct quotes are suitable here; put things into your own words please. --K. Peake 18:18, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- "it was streamed over 10 billion times within two months of its release," → "it was viewed over 10 billion times within two months of release," per the body
- "and attracted widespread speculation as to the meaning of its "cryptic" and "absurd"" → "The song attracted speculation as to the meaning of its satirical" to summarize better, starting a new sentence and add a bit more about the lyrical content of the song too
- Comment: what happened to this? --K. Peake 18:18, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
Background
[edit]- "(as of January 2005)," → "by January 2005,"
- [3][1][4][5] should be in numerical order
- Not done --K. Peake 18:18, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- [3][1][6] should be in numerical order
- Change "in 2023" to mentioning the exact date of the album instead so the release date in the infobox is sourced
Composition
[edit]Inspiration
[edit]- Move img to the left
- The story named in the infobox should be mentioned in prose here for it to properly sourced
Lyrics, interpretation and instrumentation
[edit]- [3] should only be invoked at the end of the first sentence not after cryptic too, as the end is literally next from this
- Ditto for the Ludwig Wittgenstein sentence especially since there is another ref backing this up
- Pipe compound ideograph to Compound ideographs itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
- Img looks good!
- "Chinese music industry, including Na Ying," → "Chinese music industry, including Ying,"
- "believed that this song" → "believed that the song" but this quote does not appear to be sourced
- "readings draw parallels" → "readings drew parallels"
- "that dominates throughout."" → "that dominates throughout"." per MOS:QUOTE
Reception and charts
[edit]- Retitle to Reception since chart performance counts as a form of this
- Mention the names of any reviewers who are identified from the sources
- Not done you missed a couple --K. Peake 18:18, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- "volcanic anti-establishment mentality."" → "volcanic anti-establishment mentality"." per MOS:QUOTE
- "Singer Wang Feng, who is possibly" → "Feng, who is possibly" since his full name was already used in the previous section
Commercial performance
[edit]- "and as of December 29, 2023," → "and up to December 29, 2023,"
Notes
[edit]- [3] does not need to be invoked since it is already at the end of the same sentence as the note in prose
References
[edit]- Copyvio cannot be checked, but looks like an absence of quotes mostly
- Cite What's on Weido as website on ref 1
- Wikilink South China Morning Post on ref 2
- Cite BBC News as publisher with the wikilink on ref 4
- Wikilink The Economist on ref 5
- Cite Hudson Institute as the publisher with wikilink on ref 9
- Cite DW as publisher and pipe to Deutsche Welle on ref 10
- Wikilink The Japan News on ref 11
- Wikilink United Daily News on ref 12
- Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 13
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this was fast after your long wait! --K. Peake 16:16, 29 September 2024 (UTC)
- Hello @Kyle Peake, thank you very much for reviewing my article. I will most likely address the issues during WikiConference North America (which starts on the 4th). I hope that the timeframe is fine by you. Cheers, Bremps... 20:05, 30 September 2024 (UTC)
- Bremps Yeah no problem at all, the usual time frame for hold is 7 days so that's well within it anyway! --K. Peake 20:18, 30 September 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake Hello Kyle, I think I addressed everything (I pasted everything on a Google Doc and deleted the suggestions one by one as I did them). Could you please review it as soon as convenient? Cheers, Bremps... 15:32, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- @Bremps: There are some issues left unfixed, which I have identified above – please have a look and get back to me! --K. Peake 18:18, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake Hello Kyle, I think I addressed everything (I pasted everything on a Google Doc and deleted the suggestions one by one as I did them). Could you please review it as soon as convenient? Cheers, Bremps... 15:32, 4 October 2024 (UTC)
- Bremps Yeah no problem at all, the usual time frame for hold is 7 days so that's well within it anyway! --K. Peake 20:18, 30 September 2024 (UTC)
- Hello @Kyle Peake, thank you very much for reviewing my article. I will most likely address the issues during WikiConference North America (which starts on the 4th). I hope that the timeframe is fine by you. Cheers, Bremps... 20:05, 30 September 2024 (UTC)