Talk:M-28 Business (Newberry, Michigan)/GA1

GA Review

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Comments:

1. The sentence "M-28 Business Route (BUS M-28) was a state trunkline highway serving as a business route running for 9.0 miles (14.5 km) through the downtown district of Newberry in the US state of Michigan." sounds wordy.
2. "partially turned back to local" sounds awkward.
3. "decommissioned" is a possible neologism. Can another word be used?
4. Remove second link to M-28 in lead.
5. The lead of the article is a little short. Can more information be added?
6. The route description sounds a little dry. Can more descriptive information about the physical surroundings be added?
7. Change "In downtown Newberry, M-28A followed M-48 south and back to M-28." to say "In downtown Newberry, M-28A followed M-48 south, returning to M-28."
8. Can you add a picture of the route as it looks today, a historical picture of the route, or an old map scan to the article?

I am placing the article on hold. Dough4872 (talk) 01:37, 8 July 2009 (UTC)

Replies:

1. Reworded.
2. Was missing the word "control" so it should read better now. Please advise if it doesn't.
3. Word swapped, but the word is acceptable per other previous discussions.
4. Done.
5. I played with the wording a bit, to break it into two paragraphs.
6. Since the highway designation hasn't existed in over 50 years, any sources I have access to currently would be about the current physical surroundings, not the ones that existed then.
7. Reworded.
8. I added a scan of the October 1, 1952 map showing the Newberry area and BUS M-28.

Let me know if you have any other suggestions. Imzadi1979 (talk) 05:12, 8 July 2009 (UTC)

I will pass the article. Dough4872 (talk) 16:09, 8 July 2009 (UTC)