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GA Review

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Reviewer: Retrolord (talk · contribs) 11:36, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will review. KING RETROLORD 11:36, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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This article is ridiculously long. And therefore violates criteria 3B. Sections that require significant trimming/outright removal include:

  1. Criminal investigation
  2. Conspiracy theories
  3. Awards and honors (Seriously, this should be at most 1/3 of its current size)
  4. Early life (Again, this requires a major cut down)

"My purpose is to serve humanity." This box quote should be removed, or at least formatted properly. KING RETROLORD 12:02, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"and Taliban commanders were still alive" What does that mean? Please clarify, I think we all know taliban commanders are alive. KING RETROLORD 12:02, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The article also fails to mention her speech at the UN, which is an event she is known globally for. KING RETROLORD 12:02, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

To sum up, I have serious concerns about this article. It has been delisted before and probably won't pass this review either. I'll place it on hold expecting some major improvements be made. KING RETROLORD 12:02, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I haven't worked on this one previously, but this happens to be an article I'm interested in as one of the 100 most popular WikiProject Human Rights articles. I may see what I can do about addressing the above in the next few days. -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:07, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
User:Khazar2 You are most welcome to try, do you want me to leave the GA review open? KING RETROLORD 08:18, 22 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Yep, I should get to this sometime in the next few days. Thanks! -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:31, 22 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

To-do for self: reduce unneeded citations in lead -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:08, 23 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Okay, I've been working on this for a few hours now, and I think you should fail it. You're right that the level of detail is just too much, while other aspects aren't sufficiently covered; I've now deleted close to half the article's prose, but expanding and making sure things aren't missing is going to take me longer. It's going to be a quite different article by the time I'm done and so probably doesn't meet the stability criterion, even if I got done in a reasonable timeframe.
Thanks for taking the time to review this, and good call on the 3b problems; it makes it easier for me to revise aggressively when a GA reviewer has pointed out the same issues. I do still hope to renominate this in a week or two, but we'll see. -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:49, 24 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Okey dokey. I'll fail it, (Probably the best option). If you need a reviewer in a week or two or whenever you're done fixing the article, well, you know who to ask! Thanks, King∽~Retrolord 04:30, 24 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! That's very kind of you to offer, but I think it's probably better to get a fresh reviewer just to get as many eyes on this important article as possible. I do appreciate your giving me a push to start revising this one, though. -- Khazar2 (talk) 11:40, 24 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]