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GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 talk 04:17, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will review sometime in the next few days. Ruby2010 talk 04:17, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  2. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  1. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  2. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  1. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  2. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Small nitpicking errors :)

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There are a few faults to be found.

*Jack Shephard's struggles --> Jack Shephard's struggle
*which would later become his wife --> who would later....
*realtime --> either needs to be "real-time" or "real time"
*...decide to enter the now-open hatch shaft. --> decide to enter the, now open, hatch shaft. This also occurs again later on in the plot summary.
*Spinal cord injury could do with a link.
*the ability to walk is extremely unlikely. --> "would be extremely unlikely?" Make your own mind up on that one...
*During that he falls. Needs to be expanded in order to avoid confusion.
*search the jungle for Walt Lloyd's (Malcolm David Kelley) dog This is clunky. [Walt Lloyd|Walt]'s...?
*Then Locke appears --> Fine as a sentence, but it sounds more encyclopaedic as "Locke then appears"...
*when suddenly Kate realizes that there is something in there. Needs revision...
*rappels will probably need a link to abseiling, because I'm English and, it being Americanized, had to look up what it meant...
*but Locke then is revealed --> Locke is then...
*was frustrated at not revealing in the reception section, this doesn't make sense.

That Ole' Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 18:10, 15 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

*The beginning of the plot mentions that Jack doesn't want to wait, but John wants to go in in the morning, roughly. Isn't that the other way around? Apologies if I'm simply reading wrong.