Talk:Manchester United F.C. 9–0 Ipswich Town F.C./GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:12, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"finished in a 9–0 win for Manchester United, a result that stands alone as the record home win in the competition's history and the joint biggest win either home or away." - too many mentions of the word "win" in a single sentence. Try to use another word where possible
One replaced. The others are fine. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:50, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"while Ipswich's goalkeeper was arguing with the referee," - It would help to mention the name of the Ipswich goalkeeper here
Thus added. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:51, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink free kick to its respective article
Done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:51, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

~~"However, they had been knocked out of the 1994–95 UEFA Champions League" - "knocked out" is unencyclopedic~~
- How so? That is a common term for being eliminated from a tournament. – PeeJay 20:57, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - Well, it appears to me at first glance to be less formal than the word "eliminated" MWright96 (talk) 07:10, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - No, it's fine. Single-elimination tournament for instance suggests "knockout" as a perfectly apt alternative way of putting it. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:19, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      - Struck
"Ipswich Town had returned to the top flight of English football in time for the start of the Premier League in the 1992–93 season;" - know that this sentence is correct but cannot find it anywhere in the "1993/94 Season Review" Premier League reference
Added ref. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:49, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"In the period between the two clashes between the two sides that season," - repetition of the word "between"
Removed. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:46, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"was left on the bench." - think this could do with a little rewording to pass WP:LIMITED
Maybe. Tweaked. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:37, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Would it be appropriate to wikilink transfer request to Transfer market?
Sure. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:36, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"which was rejected by Ferguson." - spell out his full name and wikilink it since it is the first time it will be mentioned
Done.The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:35, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Kanchelskis, along with Giggs," - spell out Giggs' full name and added a link to it
Done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:34, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"but the French forward was serving a nine-month suspension." - maybe it would help to state that Cantona was suspended for kicking a spectator in an earlier match
As you like. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:38, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink Stretford End
Done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:33, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove the wikilink for Ryan Giggs since it is second time he is mentioned
Done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:34, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink the first mention of the terms cross, corner, overhead kick, volley and free kick to their respective articles
Linked. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:44, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"The result was Manchester United's biggest league win in 103 years, matching the nine-goal margin they recorded in a 10–1 win" - repetition of the word "win"
Fixed. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:31, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He was later quoted as" - I feel like there is a word missing from this portion of text
Well I added some more words. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:32, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The victory wiped out Blackburn's goal difference advantage" - try to come up with a more formal phrase rather than use "wiped out"
Done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:45, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 6 is missing the page number where the story can be found in that day's edition of The Observer
Done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:30, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It appears that the work field in Reference 9 is missing
Done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:31, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
References 10, 12, 14 does not have the name of the newspapers
Added. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:29, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Those were all of the issues that I discovered in the article. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 20:52, 28 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96 (and Harrias) I've addressed or responded to all the issues above, thanks for the review. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:52, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: and Harrias Am now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk)