Talk:Matt Moore (baseball)/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:53, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
Will review MWright96 (talk) 19:53, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
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Lead[edit]
- "Moore chose to sign with them rather than attend the University of New Mexico, where he had previously committed." - think you might want to clarify Moore had originally committed to play college baseball for those wondering
- "Moore struggled in his second season with the Giants," - struggled with his playing technique/form?
- Wikilink bullpen to the relevant article
- "but he had to be shut down after suffering a knee injury during his second game of the year." - what does shut down mean in this instance?
Done reworded Kncny11 (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
Early life[edit]
- "Moore was born on June 18, 1989, in Fort Walton Beach, Florida." - birth date needs a reliable source to verify it since the Albuquerque Journal does not mention it
- "The family moved to Edgewood," - wording is a little too close to the source material
- Wikilink scout to the appropriate article in the second paragraph
Minor leagues[edit]
- Wikilink XM Futures Game to the relevant article
Tampa Bay Rays[edit]
- The extra wikilinks for shutout and New York Yankees need to be removed
- "He recovered in time for his first major league start on September 22," - recovered from what?
Done changed to "his performance" Kncny11 (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
- "Moore started with the Rays in 2012 as part of a five-man starting rotation" - began and player, respectively
- Wikilink disabled list to the relevant article only on the first mention
- "Before being shut down for the season," - how about Before his season ended early, or something similar to make it more understandable?
Done changed to "In the 10 innings that he did pitch that season" Kncny11 (shoot) 14:33, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
- "striking out 27.1% of the batters he faced in April" - the symbol % should be spelt out per MOS:PERCENT
San Francisco Giants[edit]
- "After reports emerged that Moore would be wearing No. 55 with the Giants," - the template No. should be added to the text in bold
- "2017 proved to be the worst season of Moore's career." - The 2017 season proved to be the worst of Moore's career.
Texas Rangers[edit]
- Texas Rangers doesn't need to be linked here since its already linked earlier in the main prose
- Wikilink bullpen to the relevant article
Detroit Tigers[edit]
- Detroit Tigers doesn't need to be linked here since its already linked earlier in the main prose
- "in the hopes that he would follow Mike Fiers as a low-risk pitcher heading into a rebound season." - in anticipation
- Wikilink bunt to the appropriate article
Pitcher profile[edit]
- Baseball America and the term cutter don't need to be linked since they already are earlier in the article
- "Early in his career, sports journalists predicted that Moore would become the Rays' ace thanks to his strong pitch repertoire and velocity." - because of his
- Wikilink strike zone
- "which has led to questions of pitch control" - questions by whom?
Done reworded as per the article, which also cites a few pitchers that talk about how they'd never in a million years tuck their thumb like that Kncny11 (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
Shall put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query each of the points raised in this review MWright96 (talk) 11:06, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
- MWright96 Thank you for the quick and thorough review! I believe everything has been addressed :) Kncny11 (shoot) 14:39, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
- @Kncny11: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 17:38, 23 May 2021 (UTC)