Talk:Mernda line/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Keresluna (talk · contribs) 18:13, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
Ok, I'll review this article, although it might take me some time as I might be busy for the next few days. Keres🌕Luna edits! 18:13, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
- @Keresluna thank you for beginning to review the article! I am available to complete this during the week so I'm ready for the feedback. If I get a bit busy (with school or something else) I'll let you know. Currently there are 2 articles ahead of you in the queue for me to act on their feedback. This should be quick however, so I'll make my way to this article relatively soon. Recently, two of my articles that I've nominated have been invalidly quick-failed. I am ready and willing to act on all feedback, even if it is extensive. Thank you for taking the time to review the article. HoHo3143 (talk) 22:20, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
- @Keresluna just wanted to provide you with an update regarding the placement of this article in the queue. This article is now second in the queue due to another article being promoted, so I'm ready to receive additional feedback. The user reviewed the article ahead in the queue is on holiday, so this article effectively takes priority for feedback. HoHo3143 (talk) 10:21, 17 August 2023 (UTC)
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | Check. |
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | Earwig didn't find anything. |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | Stable. |
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7. Overall assessment. | Pass. |
Sourcing[edit]
Just a quick glance for now. Keres🌕Luna edits! 18:27, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
- 'The Epping line was electrified to Reservoir in 1921, with an AEC railmotor providing a shuttle service between Reservoir and the terminus at Whittlesea. Preston-Reservoir station was renamed Reservoir in 1909.' in the 20th century section is unsourced.
- 'The line to Epping itself was reopened and electrified in 1964, with the remaining line dismantled in the 1970s. However, the right-of-way beyond Epping was retained to allow future expansion of the rail corridor.' in the 20th century section is unsourced.
- The list of the 'Major construction commenced in October 2010, with works including:' is largely unsourced.
- 'Prior to the lines official opening, a community open day was held to promote the new stations to the local residents.' in the Mernda extension section is unsourced.
- 'At the end of these works, the Mernda line will have 12 remaining crossings on the corridor that are not proposed for removal.' in the Future section is unsourced.
- 'From 2025, Keon Park station will be elevated as part of level crossing removal works.' in the Stations section is unsourced.
- How is the chart in the Station section sourced? I don't see any source for the Terrain, Train Connections, and Other Connections column.
Unfortunately its very hard to reference these three columns. For terrain, I just looked at photos of the stations and then assigned it a level. For train connections, I looked at the linked wikipedia page to see a summary and then verified it by looking at the PTV website. Finally, for other connections I also viewed the wikipedia page and then verified it by looking at the PTV website, associated coach maps, and the skybus website. On all other promoted GA articles, there hasn't been the need for any sourcing. If you firmly believe in sourcing being required, I am open for suggestions on how to implement it
- Same comment above for chart in the 'Operations' section.
Another user created this table so I'll ask them for the source that they used and add it in.
- Ref 64 needs to be properly formatted.
- fixed. info is hard to access due to the paywall
- Random ref checks:
- 60: Checks out.
- acknowledged
- 29:
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- 63:
- acknowledged
- 8:
- acknowledged
- 60:
Dead link: 1, 21
- done
Grammar[edit]
@HoHo3143: Sorry for taking so long to review the article. I will try to finish in a few days. Meanwhile, here are some grammar comments; feel free to reject them as you see fit. Keres🌕Luna edits! 20:32, 21 August 2023 (UTC)
- @Keresluna thank you for this. Just to give you the heads up, I've got a busy few days coming up so I'll be getting to this towards the end of the week. Feel free to complete the review in the mean time and I'll get to it shortly. HoHo3143 (talk) 11:11, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
- 'with 24 hour service available' to 'with 24-hour service available'
- 'Mernda line run with a two three-car formations' to 'Mernda line run with two three-car formations'
- 'on the now closed Inner Circle line' to 'on the now-closed Inner Circle line'
- 'in addition to duplication of the line' to ' in addition to the duplication of the line'
- 'work on the four kilometre extension, in addition to design work' to 'work on the four-kilometre extension, in addition, to design work'
- 'on the new section of track' to 'on the new section of the track'
- 'statewide developers contribution fund. Since the 2017 acquisitions, there has been little planning' to 'statewide developers' contribution fund. Since the 2017 acquisitions, there have been little planning'
- 'Mernda line operates from approximately' to 'Mernda line operate from approximately'
- 'with 60 minute frequencies' to 'with 60-minute frequencies'
- 'throughout the duration of works for affected' to 'throughout the duration of work for affected'
- 'history have been government run: from' to 'history have been government-run: from'
- 'and ground level designs' to 'and ground-level designs'
- 'carriage and can accommodate of up to 432 seated passengers in each six car configuration' to 'carriage, and can accommodate up to 432 seated passengers in each six-car configuration'
- 'however, there are some stations that haven't been' to 'however, some stations haven't been'
- 'three position signalling which is widely used across the Melbourne train network. Three position' to 'three-position signalling which is widely used across the Melbourne train network. Three-position'