Talk:Monster (Gabbie Hanna song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) --Kyle Peake (talk) 04:53, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good
"October 26, 2018 simultaneously" → "October 26, 2018, simultaneously"
Not sure if encore should be wikilinked
"prominently features Hanna belting" → "prominently features Hanna belting a line"

It is not solely a line, and I think this suffices for the lead.

Mention the lyrical theme

It is mentioned: "The lyrics of "Monster" explore the theme of losing friends and self-analysis"

"was uploaded onto" → "was uploaded to"
"the same day of the singles' digital release" → "the same day as the single's digital release"
"It features her" → "The video features her"
"hinting at her suicide" → "hinting at Hanna's suicide"
Remove wikilink to suicide as this is definitely overlinking
"experienced minor success" → "experienced minor success"

Where is the change??

"on Billboard's" → "on the Billboard"
"In early December 2018" → "In December 2018"
"There, she performed" → "During her interview, the singer performed"

Background and composition

"released for digital download on" → "released for digital download in various countries on"
"song, featuring her" → "song, which includes her"
Should Carpool Karaoke be wikilinked actually?

Yes, indeed.

"that initially she had chosen" → "that she initially chose"
"During the lyrics, Hanna explores" → "Hanna uses the lyrics to explore"
Remove wikilink to imagery
"...that just doesn't work." remove speech marks as they are not needed since we know it's a quote from the style

Internet meme

"sounded not meshed."" → "sounded not meshed"." consistency
Remove WikiLink to YouTube

Music video

"was uploaded onto" → "was uploaded to"
"and was directed" → "which was directed"
"she takes out matches out" → "she takes matches out"
"as both make eye contact" → "as the two make eye contact"
"Hanna chases her" → "Hanna chases the girl"
"shots show the singer" → "shots show her"
"as well as her either" → "as well as either"
Remove wikilink on suicide, again

Track listing

Good

Charts

"Monster" Version → "Monster"

Release history

Territory → Country

External links

Remove this

References

Date formats need to be consistent
Cite various iTunes stores for refs 1 and 2 to verify that the releases were various
Ref 7 is unreliable per discussion; try to fix it with a reliable ref that reports the same content

The source may be unreliable, but we are not holding on to what's written there or something. The site shows the official video if Hanna giving the interview on the song, and this is definitely reliable.

Ref 8 shouldn't say Billboard in the title

Final comments and verdict

Decent work here, On hold for now. --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:18, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Though Cartoon network freak has gone on holiday, I will leave this on hold still as it would be unfair to fail it when there's not major issues as the user announced their holiday after my review. --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:03, 31 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: Thank you very much for the review. I have responded to the comments. Greetings; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:35, 4 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Will gladly ✓ Pass this now! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:21, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]