Talk:Moving On (The Office)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Dom497 (talk · contribs) 20:37, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
The article will be on hold for 7 days. Please see the comment section below.--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit]

"...but her potential manager (Odenkirk) ...", - Is Odenkirk the actor's real name? If so, is a name to the character given? If not, is the actor's name known?--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Clarified.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Gabe (Woods)", and "Aunt Shirley (Gillis)", - Put full names.--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The plan inevitably works as Gabe is still attracted to Erin and makes several uncomfortable remarks and Alice brings up Pete's immature past, prompting arguments to break out in the conference room", - Doesn't sound right with the two "and"'s. I also think replacing the first "and" with a comma still would sound off. A re-write of the sentence should do the trick.--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Dwight, dejected, tells her that, while he still loves her, she should be faithful to her husband.", - Too many breaks/commas.--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Who is the "Scranton Strangler"?--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Clarified.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"M. Giant of Television Without Pity..." - First name?--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Some ref's are missing the "date=" parameter.--Dom497 (talk) 21:03, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The only one that is missing the date is the first one, and that is because the date isn't supplied on the page.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry, my mistake.--Dom497 (talk) 21:42, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have addressed or clarified all of the issues! Thanks for the review.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Pass!--Dom497 (talk) 21:42, 22 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]