Talk:Mrs. Puff/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 19:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)
- Comments
- In the lead, I would link "season one" to the article on the season.
Done.
- I would include a brief line in the first paragraph of the lead that described a little more of the production/background of the character, specifically why Mrs. Puff was created from the network's request for a school setting.
- Done.
- I was a little confused by this sentence (She would like nothing more than to pass SpongeBob, as he is her most dedicated and hard-working student). From what I remember of the show, she wants to pass SpongeBob because she finds him annoying and does not like how she keeps destroying things and putting her life in danger whenever he practices driving, not because he is a dedicated student.
- I added a sentence to the lead about the destruction and fear that SpongeBob causes whenever he drives. Most episodes made pre-movie establish that SpongeBob is a good student and aces every written or oral test, but just can't keep from panicking while trying to drive for real. Character bios for Mrs. Puff (such as this one that is cited on the page) describe that as her rationale for wanting to pass him, even though some later episodes certainly seem to change it. If I find a source that describes the newer portrayal, I will probably modify the first sentence you mentioned, but I think it should stay for now.
- This is more of a clarification question, but have the creators or anyone from the show's production talked about Puff's relationship with Krabs (i.e. where the idea came from, etc.). I was just curious about this.
- All I've been able to find are a few Tweets from Vincent Waller (one of the current showrunners) about their relationship. He has said that he was involved in the choice to continue their relationship after it was introduced, but I don't think it's of enough substance to work into the development section.
- Would Rizzo's critical response to the voice actor and the entire second paragraph in the "Voice" subsection be more appropriate in the "Reception" section? I can see that working better as a paragraph in that section, and incorporating the information about Catlett into the previous subsection (under this method, I would recommend that the two subsections be removed, and just put it all under the "Character" section as it is too short then to separate into two smaller subsections).
- Done. I moved the info to "Reception" and put the information about Catlett under "Creation and development".
- You need ALT text for the images.
- Done.
- For the phrase "Mrs. Puff sings a track", I would clarify that it is Catlett as she is the one really singing as the character.
- Done.
- Final comment
- Wonderful work with this article. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 19:23, 2 June 2017 (UTC)
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