Talk:My Man (Tamar Braxton song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 21:42, 12 November 2017 (UTC)
Review arriving in the next days. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:42, 12 November 2017 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
- as the lead single from the album → you can use "record" here to not repeat yourself
- It was produced by Bob Robinson Jr. → use "My Man" instead of "It" here as your previous sentence also starts with "it"
- The song is a ballad and torch song; the lyrics are about infidelity and its negative impact on a relationship. → A torch song and ballad, it lyrically adressed infidelity and its negative impact on a relationship
- number three on the Adult R&B Songs Billboard chart, at number nineteen on the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart, and at number twenty-one on the Hot R&B Songs Billboard chart. → The single peaked at number three, 19 and 21 on Billboard's Adult R&B... Hip-Hop Airplay component charts, respectively.
Infobox[edit]
- I would capitalize "radio edit" to "Radio edit"
- Unlink "Blind" in the chronology as the article doesn't exist
Background and release[edit]
- Unlink Tamar Braxton
- "self-titled" is really not that encyclopedic, so I would replace it with "eponymous"
- "My Man" was released on April 27, 2017; Braxton announced it through her official Instagram account → Did she announce it before or after the release? If it's before, you can say "...2017, preceded by an annoncement..." and if it was afterwards, use "...2017, followed by..."
- about similar experiences → You need to contextualize "similar experiences". What do you mean by that?
- Braxton featured the track during → Braxton can't "feature" a track on a TV show. Use "It was used for..." instead.
- which aired the same day. → you repeat yourself with "in the same day"
- had played it for her father; she told him that → had played it for her father, whom she told that
Lyrical interpretation[edit]
- She connected the song's lyrics → The singer also connected the song's lyrics
- called the song a "fiery torch song about → you say "song" two times here; replace the first instance with "it"
- In the lead, you say the song was a ballad, but that is not included here
Reception[edit]
- and The Boombox's Trent → replace "and" with "while"
- Libby Hill pointed to Braxton's → "pointed to" is not the right word choice here. Use "pointed out"
- "the next best break-up remedy since ice cream" → Haha
- Numbers above ten shouldn't be written out. Also, fix the "Billborard chart" repetition in a similar way to the lead
Music video and promotion[edit]
- The music video for "My Man" → This is an abrupt start for a section. Start with something like "An accompanying music video..."
- video, Braxton goes to her lover's hotel room → use "the singer" here for alternation
- before confronting him. After taking back her coat, Braxton leaves the hotel → before confronting him and taking back her coat to leave the hotel.
Track listings[edit]
- The plural in the title is superfluous
Personnel[edit]
- Flawless ;)
Charts[edit]
- Flawless ;)
Release history[edit]
- Fixed the table for you
Other stuff[edit]
Copy-violation[edit]
- 29.6% is acceptable!
References[edit]
- As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
- Avoid shouting in ref no. 17
- Fix "His His" issue in ref no. 27
Outcome[edit]
Good job with the article! I've placed it On hold for 7 days to allow edits from you. Please ping me when you're ready. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:31, 13 November 2017 (UTC)
- @Cartoon network freak: Thank you for the review. I greatly appreciate your help! Aoba47 (talk) 23:58, 13 November 2017 (UTC)
- Glad to pass this! Congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:58, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.