Talk:Nayirah testimony/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) 18:05, 9 May 2018 (UTC)

• I'll start the review for this in a couple of days. auntieruth (talk) 18:05, 9 May 2018 (UTC)

• Hi, @MagicatthemovieS: I apologize for the long delay in getting to this review. After a preliminary read through, I can offer the following comments before I start a formal review.

1. Background could include a precis on the war, when, who, how, why.
2. Followed by Controversy, which explains what happened with accusations of genocide, followed by explaination of the sub players; hill and Knowlton, etc., plus each role they played
3. The material on Hill and Knowlton should be consolidated and linked.
4. For that matter, all entities should be linked in the lead and in the body at first mentions of participants
5. Isn't there an info box for this? It would help explain the situation better.
6. Make sure your word choices are what you mean.

Cheers! auntieruth (talk) 16:21, 11 May 2018 (UTC)

Failed "good article" nomination

This article has failed its Good article nomination. This is how the article, as of May 26, 2018, compares against the six good article criteria:

1. Well written?: not well written. Confusing narrative, repetitive,

2. Verifiable?: the qualify of writing calls into question its accuracy

3. Broad in coverage?: n

4. Neutral point of view?: n

5. Stable?: y

6. Images?: y

as I have suggested above, this needs a significant copy edit, and a better structure to lead the reader through a complicated and controversial subject

When these issues are addressed, the article can be renominated. If you feel that this review is in error, feel free to have it reassessed. Thank you for your work so far.— auntieruth (talk) 19:17, 26 May 2018 (UTC)