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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 23 August 2021 and 10 December 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Emilyreardon.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 01:32, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

WikiMedicine Course Edit Plan

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Greetings fellow wikipedians! I will be taking on improving this page for the next month as part of a wikiproject medicine course at my medical school. In the interest of motivational deadlines, I will aim to complete the following work-plan:

Proposed Work Plan
11/27/2018 Picked topic. I’ve picked this topic because the page is ranked as a start, with mid importance. I feel the organization can be improved, and content increased.
12/3/2018 Drafted and published this work plan to the talk page
12/5/2018 First edits
12/11/2018 Initial evaluation of article, including proposal of new subsections and where new/updated information can be added

Proposed changes:

• Update lead and recheck sources.

• Add citations for several statements, such as “They remain the most frequent neurological problem in the nursery” and ‘Fewer than half of the affected infants develop seizures in later life”

12/14/2018 • Add subsections in accordance with Wikiproject medicine’s disease/diagnosis template: Causes, Mechanism, Diagnosis

• Citations and sources, including citations within the section “Classifications”

12/17/2018 • Add subsections in accordance with Wikiproject medicine’s disease/diagnosis template: Treatment, Outcomes/Prognosis, Research directions

• Citations and sources

12/21/2018 Course wrap up. Add “See also” links, proofread. Decide whether the page is complete enough to remove the “template message”

I welcome any feedback on these proposed changes or any additional thoughts, and look forward to doing the work. Thanks! Libbyburch (talk) 09:19, 2 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

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Peer review of article as part of UCSF Fall 2018 Wikipedia Medicine Elective.


Excellent changes to article thus far. The article has been expanded upon tremendously compared to when you started and I like the EEG that was added.

Things that go well in article are:
  • I feel like if I searched this topic all of my questions would have been answered
  • Vocabulary was accurate and comprehensive while minimizing the jargon. Great examples of this in the treatment and prognosis sections.
  • Article flows nicely and you put relevant embedded links where appropriate.



Suggestions/Questions

  • Under "Causes" section, I am not sure if this is grammatically correct: "Substance-Related: Neonatal abstinence syndrome occurs when maternal drug use before birth of alcohol, cocaine, narcotics, tricyclclic antidepressants,etc."
  • Are there any pictures that could be added to the intro?


Future direction I understand goal for this week is to add citations and sources as well as expand upon the "Disease/Diagnosis Template". From what I read, it seems like those goals have been achieved. Is room to expand upon the "Research Direction" subsection?

Overall, excellent job Isbrown (talk) 06:26, 18 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]