Talk:New York-class battleship/GA1

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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 12:26, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this shortly.--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:26, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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IIRC from the review of the USS New York, her overhaul was in 1940-41. Was USS Texas overhauled at a different date (1939?) or should the As constructed, these turrets had an elevation of 15 degrees, but this was increased to 30 degrees during an overhaul in 1939. be amended?
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 20:51, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Should ... a 6th design ... be changed to "the 6th design"?
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 20:51, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I would recommend splitting Sent to reinforce the British Grand Fleet in the North Sea, she conducted blockade and escort duties, and twice came into contact with German U-Boats, and is believed to have accidentally sunk one. in two.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 20:51, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
In the subsection dealing with the USS Texas, it is not clear (at least to me) if ...ugrades to become the first ship to mount anti-aircraft weapons. means that the USS Texas was the first ship of the class to have AA weapons, or the first US ship to have them, or the first ship in general. Could you please clarify this?
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 20:51, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Adding to the preceding point: Turning back to the "armaments" subsection, I saw the prose there identifies the USS Texas as the first US battleship to have AA weapons - does that mean that there were other US Navy ships (other than battleships) fitted with AA guns?
- There were likely test ships to try them out, but as I understand, she was the first battleship to use weapons specifically designed for anti-aircraft defense. —Ed!^(talk) 20:51, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The article employs abbreviation "US" and "U.S." - please apply one form consistently.
- I've made this consistent. —Ed!^(talk) 20:51, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I made a few minor edits - mostly having to do with MOS and convert templates. Please review them and revert as needed. There are few things to mend before this nom can be passed, the most significant being the issue of the AA guns and the overhaul date. Nice article!--Tomobe03 (talk) 11:21, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review, I've fixed up the article. Sorry about the delay, been a little busy lately. —Ed!^(talk) 20:51, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

You're welcome. No sweat re delay. Everything seems to be in order, therefore I'm happy to pass this GAN. Nice work!--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:05, 15 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]