Talk:Nicole Hernandez Hammer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Edwininlondon (talk · contribs) 11:42, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to review this. First a few general comments and prose comments:

Missing birth date: I assume the reason for this is that they are no sources for this?
Nicole Hernández Hammer was born --> I believe usually the birth name is used at the beginning of the article. If a year for the name change is known then the birth name is used up to then, ideally including a sentence such as "In xxx she married y and changed her name to zzz".
In the research section a few items should be linked: climate change, Latino populations, sea level rise
Inconsistent spelling of sea level rise: no hyphen needed
I think the article would benefit from a few more lines on her research findings, e.g., a few specifics following the opening sentence of the research section. Would that be possible? I see on Google Scholar the word infrastructure appears a few times in the titles of her work, so perhaps that could be a topic?
The last bits of the research section seem more appropriate in the next section, Public outreach. This makes an even stronger ase for adding a bit more substance to the research section.
In 2013, Hammer was a part of the 2013 --> duplication of 2013 does not make for an elegant sentence
and has done many interviews and publications --> is this still in 2013? Maybe this needs a rephrase as well. This part of the sentenceseems more appropriote in the Outreach section, whereas the 2013 Climate Assessment bit seems to be more research, right?
Hammer says she wishes she took --> would it be simpler to say "Hammer regrets not taking ..."?
She and her work have--> Just "Her work has" is clearer I think
In 2015, Hammer presented then-Governor Rick Scott --> I think "a report" is missing
She was also on panel --> She was also on a panel
She has spoken --> I would write "She spoke" but then again, I'm not a native speaker
First Lady Michelle Obama to spread awareness about climate change --> that link to Climate change education comes a bit late. Would be better to link to it right away in the Public outreach section
inconsistencies in the date format in the sources: 14 December 2015 and 2019-02-11 and March 11, 2015
some sources miss a retrieval date
references 20 and 21 appear to be the same
source 1 has the wrong date, should be 2019

I'll do more on sources tomorrow. Edwininlondon (talk) 23:08, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Neither source 2 nor 3 seems to say anything about the names and origin of her parents.
Source 4 does not seem to support the bit about "develop Spanish outreach materials"
Source 5 does not mention Maryland, and it doesn't seem to mention she was a teenager in 1992
Source 8 is a dead link
Source 9: publication date and author are missing
Source 9 says "She left academic research to inform Latinos on her findings". Her leaving academia is not mentioned in the article. The article uses present tense "Hammer's research is focused .."
I couldn't find in source 9 a backup for the claim "Latino populations were the most vulnerable to sea level rise".
Source 10: the other 2 authors are missing, as well as page number, journal volume and issue. Google Scholar has it as "Bloetscher, F., Hammer, N. H., & Berry, L. (2014). How climate change will affect water utilities. Journal (American Water Works Association), 106(8), 176-192."
Source 14 is a dead link

Other than the above sourcing issues I see no furher issues with the GA criteria. Edwininlondon (talk) 14:39, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for picking this up so quickly. I'll address a few notes tonight and continue working on it throughout the week.

Yes, I was never yet able to find a reliable source for her birthday, but an unreliable, BLP-violating source says June 19, 1975. I believe for now, for the sake of BLP, it's best to leave it blank until a more accurate source can come up.

Removed Hammer
Done linked those terms
removed the hyphen
removed redundant 2013
One of them is 2013, though one of them is from 2015 so I added a general time period.
Combined them into Her work
You're right, "she spoke" would be correct there since the event was years ago.

For the source about her being a teenager in 1992, the correct source says she was 16. I removed the mitigating source that perhaps distracted from the timeline. As for early life and family related things, I can pull from sources in-or-related-to her brother Oscar's article because they go more into depth. Trillfendi (talk) 00:11, 12 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Trillfendi: Just checking if you plan on working a bit more on this. Edwininlondon (talk) 22:33, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Status query

Edwininlondon, Trillfendi, where does this nomination stand? While there were article edits in early February, it's been well over three weeks since anything has been done there, and over five weeks since a post here. Thank you. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:20, 1 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, forgot about this. As soon as I have time in the next few days I will list the things I think still need to be done before it can pass. Not everything I mentioned above is required. Thank you for reminding us. Edwininlondon (talk) 09:39, 2 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Failed on sourcing. As well as the sourcing issues mentioned above, the Research section's final sentence is missing a source. It should not be hard at all to fix these issues. Happy to help. Edwininlondon (talk) 21:53, 3 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]