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GA Review

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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 19:06, 15 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Seems like it could be expanded on a bit more.

Background

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  • KMFDM had finished their "Angstfest" tour in support of Angst in 1994 --> KMFDM had finished their Angstfest tour in support of Angst in 1994.
  • Background doesn't seem to flow very well; just reads as a bunch of facts put together. Try fluffing it out a bit.

Production

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  • Doesn't seem like "Nihil is one of only two KMFDM studio albums (Opium being the other) that does not feature cover artwork by pop-artist Brute!. Instead, the cover was designed by Rieflin's wife Francesca Sundsten." belongs in a production section. Maybe if it was retitled to "production and artwork". Additionally, the last sentence is unsourced.

Release

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  • The bit rate of the sample needs to be reduced to around 54, per the sample guidelines.

Critical reception

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  • Nihil received very favorable reviews. --> Nihil received very favorable reviews from music critics.
  • No --> number
  • called --> labelled

References

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  • A few issues with the references. TV.com and Allmusic aren't magazines or published sources, so they should not be in italics. Make sure this is addressed throughout the article.
  • Ref 13 --> Should be like ref 20

Thanks for the review! It will probably take me a while to bulk up the background section, but I can address two issues right now:

  • "No." is actually the correct format per WP:MOS.
  • I don't think the sentence "The band would return to using Brute!'s work on the next album, Xtort." needs a ref, since clicking that wikilink shows the album cover.

The rest I will start working on. Thanks again! Torchiest talkedits 19:56, 15 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Yeah, it looks good to me. Maybe also mention a bit about their last album. Maybe also reword "Sascha Konietzko and Günter Schulz worked with former KMFDM member Raymond "Pig" Watts on an EP entitled Sin Sex & Salvation" like "Sascha Konietzko and Günter Schulz, who produced Nihil, previously worked with former KMFDM member Raymond "Pig" Watts on an EP entitled Sin Sex & Salvation" Statυs (talk) 21:09, 15 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Okay, I added a few more details to those two areas. Schulz didn't actually do regular production, so I clarified that and then added info about Konietzko and Shepard into the production section instead of background. Torchiest talkedits 04:17, 16 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Second lookthrough

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  • The background section is for information about what happened before the production of the album. So the information about the album cover is irrelevant here. I think release would be the best place to put it. Also, It should probably be retitled "background and development".
  • A handful of other studio musicians were brought in to help in a very limited capacity. --> Unsourced
  • Nihil is one of only two KMFDM studio albums (Opium being the other) that does not feature cover artwork by pop-artist Brute!. and The band would return to using Brute!'s work on the next album, Xtort. --> Need sources
  • Everything else looks good to me; I'm just not 100% happy on the whole background part of the article.

I added sources for Brute! and the horn players, and moved the artwork to the release section. I also added some more background information, but I don't feel like there's really any information on "development" that would necessitate renaming the section. Anything like that is in the next section. What do you think? Torchiest talkedits 03:51, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Looks better. I still just feel like something is missing. As someone who isn't familiar with the group, I'm just not getting the full picture, if you know what I mean. Are Sascha Konietzko and En Esch guitarists for the band? It might bring a little more light to "with a live act that sometimes had four guitarists playing at once". Statυs (talk) 03:59, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, I understand what you're saying now. As someone who has been a fan for going on twenty years, it's easy to take a lot of information for granted. I'll do some digging and get some more information in there. Torchiest talkedits 04:05, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Haha, yes, exactly. I suggest you do something like that for all these types of articles. As WP:ALBUMS states: "It should not be assumed that the reader is familiar with the artist's history and/or previously released albums." Statυs (talk) 04:13, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, I think I've clarified everyone's roles in the band at this point, and added a little more history. Is it making sense to the layman now? :) Torchiest talkedits 04:27, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Much better. I now feel confident in passing the article. Great work! Statυs (talk) 04:34, 20 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]