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GA Review

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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 03:21, 20 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this article. Cheers, Lord Roem (talk) 03:21, 20 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Section by section review

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Lead

  • Done Confusing: "As many like him Tikhonov climbed up the Soviet hierarchy through the 'industrial ladder'; by 1963 he had become Deputy Chairman of the Gosplan."
    • GDone rammar issue + change the 1963 office to a broader statement of his climb. "From peasant to Vice Premier" as an example.
  • Besides that, good!

Early life and career

  • Done I'm unsure of the policy on this, but maybe remove the red links.
  • Done Comma after '1930 to 1941'
  • Done That same sentence is a run-on
  • Done "that he met" in first sentence of first paragraph
  • Why? Change link of All-Union Communists to labeling it 'Bolshevik' Party for clarity sake.
    • The party wasn't known as the Bolshevik Party in the 1920s, 1930s and other decades. The official name of the party was the All-Union Communist Party, I can change it to Communist Party if that term is better. Is it? --TIAYN (talk) 18:43, 21 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done Comma after 'As a director'
  • Done Call 'Great Patriotic War' what it is - WWII.
  • Done Last sentence of second paragraph - change to "...became a member of the Central Committee."

Done *First sentence of last paragraph, change to "When Alexi Kosygin, the then current First Deputy, was on sick leave..."

  • Done "...was elected a candidate member of the..."

Premiership (1980-85)

  • Done Need cite for "not producing enough grain".
  • Done Need cite for "Tikhonov acknowledged..." sentence's claim
  • Working Complete a copyedit for this section. Lots of commas missing.
  • Done Last sentence here seems extraneous - suggesting removal.
  • Maybe put a picture here to make it easier to read the long block of text.

Later life and death (1985-97)

Refs/Biblio.

  • Done The Zemtsov source has spacing issues between the title of the book and the publisher name.

Concluding Thoughts

You have a week's time to resolve the concerns before a decision on promotion will be made. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 18:02, 21 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Good work so far. :-) Lord Roem (talk) 07:03, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I just read through the article again. Much better and greater clarity! :) Would you like me to now reassess it for promotion or are you still working on it? Lord Roem (talk) 17:55, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! :D I'm more or less finished, if you feel it meets the GA criteria please reassess it! As you already know I'm waiting for the Guild of Copyeditors to copyedit this article; nothing more! --TIAYN (talk) 18:22, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Then if it's all right with you, I'll just wait for one of them to go over it. That way I can look over the best version of the article. Note that I have alot of stuff on my watchlist, so please feel free to post a note on my talk page if I don't realize the copyedit has happened. Cheers, Lord Roem (talk) 18:34, 23 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]