Talk:Northern Bank robbery/GA1
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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) 20:16, 26 November 2020 (UTC)
Having an initial read-through now. Will post some comments tonight and revisit tomorrow or over the weekend. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 20:16, 26 November 2020 (UTC)
Prose/MoS:
- Chris Ward was taken from the house in County Down and driven to Poleglass "the house"? You haven't previously introduced Ward or a house so this is confusing. Do you mean from his house?
- The link on "heist" to List of heists in the United Kingdom is an Easter egg and potentially confusing. It's not where I expected the link to go.
- Why Northern Bank sterling notes which were used and not just "used sterling notes" or "used Northern Bank sterling notes"?
- was himself arrested I know what you're getting at but "himself" is redundant here (it would only be useful if he was the one making the arrests)
- Perhaps explain the relationship between Sinn Fein and the IRA for the uninitiated?
- ha! i was hoping not to, it's such a minefield! i'll have a think on that one Mujinga (talk) 15:44, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
- i've hopefully clarified things in Northern_Bank_robbery#Initial_responses Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 29 November 2020 (UTC)
- Suggest introducing Martin McGuinness on first mention.
- Cunningham avoided imprisonment on account of his age How old was he?
- alleging it had been improperly processed How so?
- Maybe explain the relevance of the City bonds robbery in the see also?
- if i put List of heists in the United Kingdom there then i could remove City bonds robbery Mujinga (talk) 15:56, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
Breadth of coverage:
- A quick Google search turned up at least one book not currently cited: Chris Moore, Ripe for the Picking: The Inside Story of the Northern Bank Robbery.
- sadly out of print and not on gbooks, added to "further reading" Mujinga (talk) 15:56, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
- £27.92 on Amazon. Admittedly a little steep. The GA criteria don't say anything about comprehensiveness or thoroughness of research so I don't think it's an issue at this level but if you were interested in taking this to FAC you would struggle to meet 1c. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 11:58, 28 November 2020 (UTC)
- This news article suggests there was fallout from the robbery not mentioned here.
- wow thanks, that's not something i came across, that's very interesting and i'll attempt to work it in Mujinga (talk) 15:56, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
- added the murder and its repercussions to the legacy section
Illustrations:
- I think you need more discussion of the banknote and a more detailed caption for the image to satisfy WP:NFCC#8.
- I know it's difficult to illustrate articles like this. Are there any other images that might be useful? Photos of people involved or mentioned, for example?
I think the GA criteria can be comfortably satisfied with just a little bit more work. There are other things I might pick up on if this were an FAC, but with a little more work still it could meet that standard. Excellent work, and I look forward to revisiting in a few days. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 21:40, 26 November 2020 (UTC)
- Hiya thanks for taking this on, I should be able to answer your comments in the next days, will ping when done, cheers Mujinga (talk) 23:38, 26 November 2020 (UTC)
- Hi HJ Mitchell I've answered everything now, please let me know what you think Mujinga (talk) 11:04, 29 November 2020 (UTC)
- Excellent work. Although there's more that could be done if you wanted to take it further, I believe the GA criteria are satisfied. Passing. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 13:43, 29 November 2020 (UTC)
- Hi HJ Mitchell I've answered everything now, please let me know what you think Mujinga (talk) 11:04, 29 November 2020 (UTC)