Talk:Not Like the Movies/GA2
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Reviewer: Jivesh boodhun (talk · contribs) 08:28, 5 September 2011 (UTC)
- Before beginning the review, i will like to tell you that you can feel free to disagree where you think i am wrong. The we, will discuss. Best of luck. And the article looks good at first sight. Now, let me dig into it. Lol. Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:35, 5 September 2011 (UTC)
Infobox[edit]
- No mention of recording location(s)
Do you mean the recording studios or just the locations (i.e. New York City)
done Crystal Clear x3 15:30, 6 September 2011 (UTC)
- Teen pop is a subgenre of pop music and as far as i see teen pop is sourced so don't you think removing pop from genres will be fine?
done
Lead[edit]
- Teenage Dream, >>> Teenage Dream (2011),
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- while production and additional writing was done >>> shouldn't this be were?
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- The pop ballad >>> Hmmm, you need to decide now whether you will use pop or teen pop
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- ballad? Is it sourced somewhere below?
yes
- Link [[Ballad (music)|ballad]] if the above answer is yes. If no, change to song. It is obvious NLITM is a ballad, nevertheless, Wikipedia wants a sources from most details.
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- The pop ballad speaks >>> is lyrically
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- doesn't >>> Avoid this form >>> does not
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- first started dating her husband>>> Hmmm, change it to first started dating her now-'husband
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- Link music critics
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- with some calling it a powerful and lovely song, as well a contemplative ballad, but noticing the song's lyrics refers "very little" to Perry's husband, Russell Brand. >>> some of whom called............ but noticed that ......... make only minimal reference to....
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- Russell Brand is linked twice. It should be linked only once.
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- at number fifty-three on Billboard Hot 100 >>> at number 53 on US Billboard Hot 100 chart
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- at number forty-one in Canada >>> at number 41 on the Canadian Hot 100 chart
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- California Dreams Tour >>> California Dreams Tour (2011)
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- Comment: You may have a look at WP:NUMBERS Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:50, 5 September 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the link!
- Comment: You may have a look at WP:NUMBERS Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:50, 5 September 2011 (UTC)
Background[edit]
- Do you know which month, year the interview took place?
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- Hello Katy Tour >>> Hello Katy Tour (2009)
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- Production and additional writing to song was >>> Shouldn't it be were?
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- She considers >>> Better use Perry here
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- after they began dating??? Or after their marriage. I am not sure what you wanted to say here. Can you clarify please?
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- track >>> To tell you frankly, i was told in the past to avoid using this word. But i am not sure if it can remain in GAs.
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- which was claiming to know something that you do not really know. >>> Will you be able to do a better wording here? If no tell me, i shall ask someone to do it for you. Feel free to ask if needed.
I replaced "really" with "actually" if that helps...c/e is not my strong suit, and thanks for the offer!
Composition[edit]
- Perry vocal range >>> Perry's vocal range
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- Link octave
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- does not feels >>> does not feel
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- as one reviewer put it >>> Mention the name of the reviewer and the online site or magazine for which he/she writes.
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- Chris Ryan from MTV Networks >>> MTV News
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- Link melody
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- During the chorus >>> add a comma after chorus and link the latter [[Refrain|chorus]]
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- Perry sings about holding out for a love that it "cinematic and dramatic/With the perfect ending"[6] and later asks if she is a "stupid girl".[7] >>> you need to mention who sated those things.
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Have a look at this. done
- PopMatters staff writer Steve Leftridge considered the track to have a "ho-hum" melody.' should be before this Its melody was compared to Britney Spears' "Everytime" (2003) and Evanescence's "My Immortal" (2003).
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- Another reviewer >>> Again, you need to mention the name, magazine, etc
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- considering it >>> considering "Not Like the Movies"
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- The song has a basic sequence of A♭5–Fm7–Cm–E♭ as its chord progression. should be after Perry vocal range spans over an octave, from F♯3 to E♭5.
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- Music sample >>> You forgot to place a full stop.
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Reception[edit]
- a contemplative ballad" >>> Finally there is one. In the composition section, replace he word song in he beginning with ballad and link it.
- of the USA Today publication >>> of USA Today (only)
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- and recommend readers to purchase the track >>> recommended and remember what i said about the word track?
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- and showcases >>> and that it showcases
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- They concluded >>> They???
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- Digital download (dab link) should be linked as [[Music download|digital downloads]]
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- On the week of August 11, 2010, >>> For the week ending August 11, 2010,
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- at number fifty-three on the Billboard Hot 100 >>> See comments on lead about numbers etc.
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- track
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- from the digital download sales of about 57,000 >>> selling 57,000 digital downloads
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Live performances[edit]
- track
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- You have to decide whether you will use present tense or past tense.
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- The song was also performed during the live 53rd Grammy Awards. >>> The song was also performed live during the 53rd Grammy Awards.
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- she sat >>> Perry sat
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- as she sang the lyrics >>> remove the lyrics (It feels repetitive)
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- This was the first time that footage had ever been seen. >>> This was the first time that footage was shown.
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- MTV Networks >>> MTV News
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- Valentine's Day–themed performance coupled with Perry's wedding footage made-up for the swing that "looked like a high school–yearbook photo backdrop". >>> Everything should be between quotes. Link Valentine's Day if a link exists on Wikipedia. I am almost sue there will be one.
done for Vday, not sure what you mean by 'between quotes'
- a similar grade??? Not similar
fixed
Track listing[edit]
Charts[edit]
References[edit]
- Ref number 3, Capitol Records is never italicized.
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- Ref number 5 should be only MTV not MTV Networks
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- Inconsistency in format of dates, example, 08-05-2010. Either use the latter form everywhere or write dates in full everywhere.
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- Billboard should be linked and it is now published by Prometheus Global Media
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- Ref number 15 should be MTV News and not just MTV
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General Comments[edit]
- Maybe you could placed a picture of Russell Brand somewhere in the article.
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- Overall, very nice article but it could have been broader. Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:43, 5 September 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:56, 5 September 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for all of your comments and suggestions Crystal Clear x3 14:24, 6 September 2011 (UTC)
- You are most welcome. I enjoyed reviewing it because i enjoy Mrs Brand's music. Lol. Feel free to ask me for help whenever needed. And i really appreciate the hard work you did and the time you invested in bettering this page. Katy Perry's songs and album, etc need attention. Not everyone has 5 number-one singles from the same album. With that being said, i hope you continue on this path. Best of luck. Jivesh • Talk2Me 05:28, 7 September 2011 (UTC)