Talk:Omen (Antestor album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Retrohead (talk · contribs) 21:46, 26 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I copyedited some sentences I found verbose. Feel free to revert anything you disagree with.--Retrohead (talk) 22:19, 26 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Can you describe what the cover depicts?
Can you provide the cities (or venues) which the band encountered difficulties?

Background

Can we lose the "Main article: Antestor" and link the band in the opening sentence?
What do you consider a "significant" lineup change? One member remaining from the original lineup or something else?
"the band claims that it never received royalties for that album". It is the band or the label?
Since we have two sections with two sentences, it might give the reader a perception that those areas are not well researched. To avoid that, can you merge "Release and promotion" with "Touring" by moving the sentences fro "Release" to the very start of "Touring"? I suggest doing the same to "Cover artwork" and "Style and lyrics".

By the way, why not rename "Style and lyrics" to "Music and lyrics"?

Style and lyrics

What does "strong" black metal means? That the album is rooted in black metal, perhaps?
Can you consider excluding "unblack metal" from the infobox because the previous note suggests this is a black metal album?

Touring

Ok, can we find something intruiging about the concerts except when and where they took place?

Critical reception

Since we have the grades in the table, I don't find it necesarry to repeat them in the prose.
Per MOS:ALBUMS, it is usually written "Personnel" instead of "Lineup". Also, credits about production, sound engineering, mastering, mixing, etc. should be provided.

Thanks, I'll work on these points! Regarding personnel, I now have a copy of the album and so can provide that info. I couldn't find the info online at the time.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 04:31, 27 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

There's been no progress here in a week, so I'll be closing the nomination as failed. If you wish to re-nominate the article, you can contact me to avoid the waiting queue.--Retrohead (talk) 18:48, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, I was lazy on this, I'll re-nominate shortly once I work on this.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 19:54, 7 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]