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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:31, 21 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks as always for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:46, 21 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • "changes in the timing of embryonic development" I got confused reading this, perhaps put it in parentheses.
Done.
  • "that ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny" as this is quite technical, is there any chance of a footnote explaining it in non-expert terms?
Added.
  • (Aside: is there any reason the article title needs (book) as a disambiguator? There is no Ontogeny and Phylogeny article, after all)
Avoids confusion with "Ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny"; if you feel that's not a worry then we can move the article after this GAN is completed.
I don't think that's confusing so I would recommend a move after this GAN. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:21, 30 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This later work was published..." unref sentence.
Added ref.
  • "fetalisation theory" any link, explanation? And I assume we're now in USEng or that would be foetalisation?
Used -z- as that's how Bolk's work is described. Not sure any better link than Louis Bolk is available.
  • "n Paleobiology, " that links to the science, not some kind of publication.
Fixed.
  • Same in the accompanying reference.
Fixed.
  • "noted that 2 years earlier" two
Fixed.
  • " ad- vanced" copy/paste issue? Fix and check others.
Made 2 fixes.
  • "excellently illustrated with often surprising examples, " this should be either attributed, quoted or neutralised in tone.
Attributed.
  • Ref 4 (along with the note above about the Paleobiology link) needs access-date and pref format=pdf
Formatted, used jstor as source.
  • "Book preview - Google Books" en-dash.
Fixed.

That's it for me. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:16, 27 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]