Talk:Operation Nordseetour/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:22, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Article title should italicise Nordseetour, suggest {{DISPLAYTITLE:Operation ''Noordseetour''}}.
- I was wondering how to do that - thanks, and done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"with heavy cruiser seeking" cruisers? or "with the heavy cruiser"?
- 'The' - added Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"in France, Admiral" that link for France is far too much of an easter egg.
- True, tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"when she attacked on the morning of 25 December." she attacked the following morning.
"later on 25 December, and" later that day.
- Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"arrived in Brest two days later" -> arrived in Brest on 27 December.
- Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"The British Royal Navy strengthened" no need for British.
- Removed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
WS5A or WS 5A?
- WS 5A, fixed
"The Kriegsmarine's (German Navy's) plans" -> "The plans of the Kriegsmarine (German Navy)"
- Tweaked along those lines Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Submarines and" U-Boats?
- Same thing really, so I've deliberately not used 'U-boat's
"The British Royal Navy anticipated" no need for British.
- Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"in April 1939. In February 1940" repetitive. Perhaps "The following February"?
- Oops, tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"fatally damaged" can fatally damage something that's not alive? Maybe critically damaged?
- Done Nick-D (talk)
"the Home Fleet during" what's that?
- - Tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"German air force" you had Germany Navy so I assume this should be German Air Force
- Yep, adjusted Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Kriegsmarine's -> Kriegsmarine's
- Fixed, I think Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"German: "North Sea Tour" German is overlinked. Template should give you instruction on how to force it to delink.
- Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"failed to understand that" interpret perhaps?
- Tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Why link Malta but not Greenland?
- Unlinked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"The carriers" link.
- Oops, I thought I already had linked aircraft carriers - fixed, and improved the wording Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Hipper's secondary armament fired" overlinked.
- Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"them.[31][20]" ref order.
- Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"December Admiral Hipper's" comma after Dec.
- Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Roskill ref needs en-dash in year range.
And Steury (spaced en-dash).
And Wragg.
- All done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 13:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks a lot for this review. Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]