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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk21:37, 28 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • ... that the state of Tamil Nadu ranks first in India in deceased organ donation rate at 1.8 per million population, which is seven times higher than the national average? Source: [1]

Created by Shanze1 (talk). Self-nominated at 08:48, 23 April 2020 (UTC).[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: Done.

Overall: Maleschreiber (talk) 23:41, 1 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Hi, I came by to promote this, and did some editing and wikifying of the article. There is close paraphrasing from the sources which should be rewritten in your own words. Switching around the same words in a sentence is still close paraphrasing.
  • Source: The southern state is the first Indian state to make certification of brain death mandatory,
  • Article: the first Indian state to make certification of brain death mandatory
  • Source: This enhances the chances of deceased organ donations.
  • Article: it enhances the chances of deceased organ donations.
  • Source: There is also a set of guidelines for non-transplant centres in Tamil Nadu to ensure that all organs get used
  • Article: Guidelines for non-transplant centres in Tamil Nadu were set to ensure that all organs get used.
  • Source: a 10-year compilation of post-transplant data of patients. Through this exercise, data on how well patients are doing after transplants and survival rates are available.
  • Article: a ten-year compilation of post-transplant data of patients which outlines how well patients are doing after transplants and their survival rates
  • Source: overseen by an Executive Committee which includes the Principal Secretary to Government of Tamil Nadu, Health & Family Welfare Dept.
  • Article: overseen by an executive committee which includes the principal secretary to the Government of Tamil Nadu's Department of Health and Family Welfare.
  • I also added a "clarification needed" tag. Please explain what a "green corridor" is.
  • Regarding the hook, it could be better. Other than a statistic, could you pull something more colorful out of the article? Mentioning the "green corridor" in the context of organ transplants might be interesting. Yoninah (talk) 23:40, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Hey, Yonihah. Hope you're well. I noticed the close paraphrasing as well but for most of these I didn't how see much differently he could rephrase them in order to avoid it.--Maleschreiber (talk) 23:15, 24 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Yoninah, Thanks. I rewrote all of those and improved the article overall. Let me know what you think of the additional hooks above. Shanze1 (talk) 07:05, 25 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Yoninah, ALT2a looks great. And the first place to use it was Chennai city which is in Tamil Nadu. It is mentioned at the end of the second para of the Operational history section, and also in the lead.

References

  1. ^ Vipin, Koushal; Raman, Sharma; Ashok, Kumar. "Impact of green corridors in organ donation: A single-center experience". Indian Journal of Transplantation. 12 (2): 110–112.