"Swift solely composed "Our Song" for the talent show of her freshman year in high school, about a boyfriend who did not have a song with" This sentence does not made sense. Im not not what you are trying to state. (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me08:46, 11 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The first part is trying to say that she wrote it, by herself, for her freshman year talent show. The second part is trying to say that she wrote it about a boyfriend who she didn't have a song with. Am I being clear? How might I rephrase it? -- ipodnano05 * leave@message22:20, 11 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Now that ive re-read it and that im awake, all it is is that its missing a word. Write as "Swift solely composed "Our Song" for the talent show of her freshman year in high school, about a boyfriend who she did not have a song with". (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me23:15, 12 July 2010 (UTC) Done[reply]
Music Video
"The accompanying music video for "Our Song" was directed by Trey Fanjoy." Needs a cite or its OR. Done
"Upon listening "Our Song", Fanjoy shared her ideals for a music video with Swift. "She had this idea for a front porch performance and the a field of flowers for another performance, then a black-and-white performance shot. It all came together in her head. She was able to translate that so well onto film. It just shows what a truly great director she is", Swift informed CMT News.[2]" Rewrite to "While listening to "Our Song"[...] Done
"The video begins a shot of Swift's toenails as she paints them." Missing word with. Please phrase as "The video begins with a shot of Swift's toenails as she paints them. Done
"Swift then sits near the edge and performs" Preforms what? Done
"Swift, casually wearing by a blue tee, white hot pants, and straight hair, is revealed to be engaging in a phone conversation in a bedroom." Rewrite to state "Swift, casually wearing a blue tee, white hot pants, with straightened hair, is revealed to be engaging in a phone conversation in a bedroom.
"[...]before furtively approaching a front porch with a blue dress and curly hair." Write "before furtively approaching a front porch seen in a blue dress with curly hair.
Again I don't think it's needed and it sounds like the dress has curly hair, the way you're saying it. LOL! Also, the "seen in" doesn't make sense to me. Look s quite a bit run-onish (let's pretend that's a word).-- ipodnano05 * leave@message22:30, 11 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Swift opened with the concert with the song and dressed in a black, knee-length dress and red cowboy boots with a design of a scull and cross bones across it, playing an acoustic guitar.[28]" Rewrite as "Swift opened with the concert with the song and dressed in a black, knee-length dress and red cowboy boots with a design of a scull and cross bones across it, playing an acoustic guitar" (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me09:16, 11 July 2010 (UTC) Done[reply]
Yes but WP:CHARTSCHART says Good and Featured class articles should not rely on unlicensed archives as convenience links, and should use official sites and licensed archives where possible. Since this link is easily replacible, i would now to avoid future conflicts. (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me23:15, 12 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Yes it does. Use aCharts to locate the week the single entered and then use billboard. Billboard is 1-100 positioning. Accoding to chart performance it entered at 80something so billboard has it. (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me05:15, 13 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The single release has a track listing and citation number 6 has the track listing. It would be no problem adding the source, it's just that I don't thing it's needed. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message04:28, 13 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"The lyrics are in first person. In the first verse, the protagonist realizes she and her boyfriend do not have a song of their own as he drives his car.[5][9]." Sentence structure error, when you read it on the main page you will see it. Also, "The lyrics are in first person." needs a cite, or its OR. Done
"The young couple come to using the events in their lives in place of a regular song in the song's refrains." Two issues, one i believe you mean came to using. Two the sentence doesnt make sense, not sure what you are trying to express.
"Those events are described in sharp detail and include slamming screen doors to sneaking out late.[10]" Sentence is unneeded. (Maybe is needed but isnt written correctly, could be grammar or flow, cant quite put my finger on it, but as of now it doesnt make sense) (CK)Lakeshade✽talk2me08:46, 11 July 2010 (UTC) Done[reply]
Swift opened the concert with the song and dressed in a black, knee-length dress and red cowboy boots with a design of a scull and cross bones across it, played an acoustic guitar. Playing not played Done
During each performance, she donned a sparkly cocktail dress and black, leather boots. Swift skipped across the stage performing, playing an rhinestoned acoustic guitar. [...]playing a (not an) rhinestoned acoustic guitar Done
