Talk:Papa Oppong/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:04, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
I'll have this to you soon JAGUAR 20:04, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments[edit]
- The lead is a bit short for an article this size, and needs to summarise the article per WP:LEAD
- Added a very descriptive lead.
- "Oppong attended Blessed Mother Teresa Catholic Secondary School in Scarborough" - can Scarborough be linked?
- Scarborough is already linked earlier in the section.
- "Oppong was absent for the Colonels' five next games" - "Colonel" hasn't been explained prior to this
- Added "Eastern Kentucky Colonels" earlier in the section.
- "as Eastern Kentucky dominated West Virginia Wesleyan College" - dominated sounds informal
- Changed to "easily defeated"
- "to help Eastern Kentucky eke past Jacksonville State" - 'eke'?
- Fixed.
- "However, his team won the game to claim the title" - which title?
- Fixed.
References[edit]
- The toolserver picked up a few errors but they seemed to work fine, although refs 7 and 8 didn't work for me?
- I do not think those links exist anymore. I have added new links that include the same information.
On hold[edit]
Well done with the work put into this article, I couldn't find anything wrong with it other than a couple of confusing sentences which could be clarified. Once the issues above are addressed then this should be good to go JAGUAR 23:03, 2 November 2015 (UTC)