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Non-encyclopedic tone[edit]

The language in this article needs to be made a little more objective and less boosterish. Below is the most questionable passage:

Listening to this album, one would think it was recorded in any of the world's best studios, not in disused buildings using top-quality microphones, a laptop and some Pro Tools. Most of the time, there are only two instruments playing–three when Irvine also plays harmonica–and the resulting sound is bright and pristine.

"One would think" isn't really an appropriate phrase for an encyclopedia, and the whole passage is too subjective. It sounds more like a press release than an objective description. 850 C (talk) 17:16, 10 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@850 C: Thank you for your comment. I fully agree and have therefore combined the first two sentences, thus removing the non-encyclopaedic prose you highlighted. I retained the reference to the sound being bright and pristine, because it is a useful fact in relation to a live album.

With kind regards;

Patrick. ツ Pdebee. (talk) 17:05, 11 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]