Talk:Party (Girls' Generation song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs) 08:53, 6 June 2016 (UTC)

Hi there, my name is CaliforniaDreamsFan, and I'll be reviewing this article! You will receive the review within a couple of days

Review

Infobox

• Add an alt please.
  •  Done
• The rest is good!

Lead section

• "native country South Korea" –––> You don't need to state this; you've already mentioned that the group is South Korean.
  •  Done
• The rest is good!

Background and release

• "whose" –––> "where" sounds a bit more appropriate.
  • I don't think "where" is grammatically correct.
• The rest is good!

Music and lyrics

• "The guitar line on the song was compared to that on Katy Perry's 2010 song "California Gurls", while the Auto-Tune croons were compared to Daft Punk's 2014 single "Get Lucky"." By whom exactly? Mention the publications and editors (if its from the same editors, just mention the surnames).
  • Section re-written
• For the audio sample, add references after you say ""Party" is an electropop and bubblegum pop song.".
  •  Done
• Also, add how many seconds it is.
  •  Done

Reception

• Writing "saying" after "A reviewer from The Malay Mail wrote a positive review,"
  •  Done
• Remove "group's native country"; you've already stated that their from South Korea.
  •  Done
• Place "meanwhile" at the front of the sentence, making it say "Meanwhile, the physical version...".
  •  Done, although it seems unnecessary.
• Add Billboard before "Japan Hot 100" chart.
  •  Done
• The rest is good!

Promotion

• You mention the director of the video in the lead, but not here? Add it after the choreographer part.
  • Director name in lead was wrong; fixed.
• "It was filmed in Ko Samui, Thailand.[28][29] It was released on July 7, 2015 in conjunction with the release of the single." These are small sentences; conjoin them by saying something like this "Filmed in Ko Samui, Thailand, it was released on July 7, 2015 in conjunction with the release of the single."
  • Section has been re-written
• Everything else is good!

Track listing

• I'd recommend you add a reference for the CD single release, as I believe the link is just for the digital release?
  •  Done

Charts

• This is really good!

Release history

• This is really good!

Footnotes

• This is really good!

External links

• This is really good!

Other additional notes

• Any credits or personnel to the song, music video, etc.? If so, I suggest you create one.
  • I don't have the CD, and haven't been able to find the credits/personnel posted online.
• Know that you've added sales to the song, could you add a sales tally table in a separate section? You can follow the table from "Traveling (song)" as a guide!
  •  Done

Overall

A very well done article! On hold for the remaining amount of touch-ups CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 07:04, 7 June 2016 (UTC)

I will be working on this, but it might take me a few days. Random86 (talk) 07:54, 13 June 2016 (UTC)

CaliforniaDreamsFan, I think I went over everything. TerryAlex has the Lion Heart CD, so credits for this song can probably be added later. Let me know if anything else needs to be addressed. Random86 (talk) 00:29, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Due to personal matters, I won't be able to access my stuff or have much computer access for the next few days, I will add the "Credits" as soon as I can. If you can pass the article now, please do. If not, please wait a bit more time. Thanks for the patience!--TerryAlex (talk) 23:48, 17 June 2016 (UTC)

It's all good; passing now CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 23:36, 20 June 2016 (UTC)