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This article sounds like a sales pitch. It should describe more and sell less. Jmeppley 19:13, 15 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]


I deleted my steps and tried to change the wording to make it sound not bias. Does this help any? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Smann2 (talkcontribs) 15:27, 17 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

That's much better. The biggest difference was made by the removal of "novel" and "exclusive". Those words just sound like corporate bragging to me. Jmeppley 17:42, 17 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]