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GA Review

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  • Just glancing at the lead, it feels far too short. That said, taking a closer glance I can't think of much to add. Perhaps a mention of personal life?
  • "He made his debut in the independent circuit on 7 April 2000, competing in promotions throughout Texas." - his debut involved him competing in multiple promotions on the one day? Reword, I think.
  • "London made his debut in Ring of Honor (ROH)" - he went from studying at Texas Uni to appearing on ROH? There must be something in between (how'd they choose him (or however it works))?
  • which led to both London and Shane brawling" - brawling implies them fighting against each other?If so remove the "both". If not, then I have no idea what it's saying...
  • "London competed in ZERO1 for several months, beginning in January 2003, before turning down a contract." - a bit confusing; wouldn't he have needed a contract to compete in the first place?
    • In the universe of pro wrestling, wrestlers can compete for promotions in dark matches (or try-outs) without contracts. I read the source, it stated that Zero-one is a japan promotion, and japanese promotions call wrestlers from North America to wrestle for their promotion without a contract, so when he wrestled a couple of shows, they were impressed and offered him a contract, which he turned down.--SRX--LatinoHeat 18:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Well, the reference is used to say that he worked at Urban Outfitters and that his brother is a music video director. Could we leave that info out? I can replace the brother one with this if it's considered reliable. Also, on a side note, is this reliable? It mentions how he began working for TNA in it. ♥NiciVampireHeart15:16, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That's about it - please leave me a talk page note when done. Cheers, —Giggy 08:19, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]