Talk:Paul Richey/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 15:14, 13 October 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 15:14, 13 October 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

• RAF Fighter Command and No. 609 Squadron RAF are duplicated links

• Fixed. Zawed (talk) 07:50, 16 October 2023 (UTC)

• Article is stable
• Images correctly licensed
• Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

• Link flying ace
• Move Second World War link to first mention
• Link sorties
• "in the Imphal Valley"?

• All of the above done. Zawed (talk) 09:02, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

• Did Richey actually command 609 Sqn?

• Yes he did although I realised I missed mentioning this in the lead. Have fixed this oversight and made a few other tweaks. Zawed (talk) 09:02, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

Early life

• Do we know the name of his father or mother?

• Added name of father. Zawed (talk) 03:19, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• Link fighter

• Done. Zawed (talk) 03:19, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

Second World War etc

• The Second World War is not explicitly mentioned until the last line of the entire article!

• Rephrased the first sentence! Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• "Shot down the same day after the engagement with the Bf 110s" does this mean he was shot down by the 110s, or something else? (ibid next sentence)

• Have rephrased both these sentences. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• Link Ashton Down

• Done. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• Link engine coolant

• Done. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• Not sure Bar needs capitalising?

• I've started doing this since noticing that the postnominal template capitalises it. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• "was published"

• Done. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• "with a posting to No. 56 Squadron" stipulate that he was in command of it

• Doublechecking my source, I found made a mistake here and conflated his commands of Nos. 56 and 609 Squadron. I have revised the discussion of No 56 Squadron accordingly. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• "December 1942" repeated year

• Deleted 1942. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• Any operational history for No. 189 Wing?

• No, unfortunately I don't have access to any sources dealing with the RAF campaign in Burma. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• "He was subsequently worked" needs a rejig

• Fixed. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• Burma campaign isn't mentioned in main text

• I've removed this from the infobox since I can't determine the nature of No. 189 Wing's role in the campaign. Zawed (talk) 03:52, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

References

• Refs 26, 27, and 28 have broken links

• I forgot to add the supp=y syntax to the LG template. Zawed (talk) 03:22, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• Not required by any means, but it would be interesting to quote an anecdote or two from Richey's books to provide colour

• I don't have any of his books at the moment, but if I go to A-Class with this one, I will look to do this. Zawed (talk) 03:54, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

• AGF on print sources
• Richey is listed in the template at the bottom of the article as having 10 kills rather than 11?

• Fixed. Zawed (talk) 03:22, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

@Zawed: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await your replies. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 13:08, 24 October 2023 (UTC)

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, thanks for the review, I have responded as above. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 03:54, 25 October 2023 (UTC)

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: just following up on this? Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:12, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

@Zawed: Oops! I've been very ill recently, still am, and my fever-addled brain truly believed that it had already passed this. Passing as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 09:18, 29 October 2023 (UTC)