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Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 19:55, 25 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Close to GA quality; placing on hold to allow improvements. My main concerns about the article relate to Wikipedia:Identifying reliable sources (medicine) (MEDRS). All cite numbers are from this revision.

  • Cite 1 isn't a MEDRS, and doesn't actually indicate that "persecution complex" is synonymous with "persecutory delusion".
minus Removed the entry; couldn't find anything in Google Scholar.
  • Cites 9/17 are identical, and not MEDRS.
minus Removed them and respective content for the 9th; couldn't find other source.
  • Cites 10 and 16 are marginal for MEDRS - replace them with journal articles or other MEDRS if possible.
 Question: Unfortunately I only found a partial alternative source for 10, it would only cover this part, People with this delusion often live a more inactive life. Should I cite, leave it as it is or remove the content?
I would leave the text as is, but add the additional cite.
Green checkmarkY Done
  • Cite 23 needs to be properly filled out with publisher/website (the name, not the partial url currently used), date, etc.
Green checkmarkY Done
  • remarkably higher is vague - either give numbers (e.g. 26% higher) or remove "remarkably"
 Question: changed "remarkably" to "significantly" (source wording), does that work?
Sounds good.
  • The first sentence under "Diagnosis" is a run-on sentence
Green checkmarkY Done
  • it's → it is
Green checkmarkY Done
  • him or her → them
Green checkmarkY Done
  • If possible, add a sentence or two discussing how prevalent the condition is (e.g. 1 in 10,000)
Green checkmarkY Done, added that 70% of first case psychosis are persecutory delusions.
  • In addition to those mentioned above, one other source (Freeman and Bebbington, currently #5) needs to be properly filled in/formated.
Green checkmarkY Done
  • Standardize date format in citations - the article currently mixes dmy and yyyy-mm-dd.
Green checkmarkY Done

Overall

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  1. Well-written
  2. Verifiable with no original research
  3. Broad in its coverage
  4. Neutral
  5. Stable
  6. Illustrated

@SpaceEconomist192: Good work. I made a few minor citation formatting copyedits, ready to pass now. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:58, 26 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]