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Good articlePersonal (Men of Vizion album) has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
November 15, 2012Articles for deletionKept
January 5, 2013Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on November 20, 2012.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Michael Jackson signed vocal group Men of Vizion to his record label, MJJ Music, in 1993, and released their debut studio album, Personal, three years later?
Current status: Good article

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 06:28, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review

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Lead
  • "with some noting similarities" with some isa bit too vague, I guess that it's the wording, tweak it a bit.
Release
  • "Originally set to be released on May 14, 1996, Personal was released" redundancy of "released"
  • I see that "weeks" is used repetitively, try to switch some of the to "issue". Example: "to re-enter at the same position for the week ending on July 20." --> "to re-enter at the same position on the chart issued on July 20."
  • "being moving back"?
  • "exited" is used too much.
  • "tying in with the song's lyric play on reversed gender roles" what does this exactly mean?
Critical
Tracklisting
  • Why not using the template? (it is not mandatory ofc)
Personnel and Credits and personnel
  • Why two different sections?
References
  • All good here.

ΛΧΣ21 06:37, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]