Talk:Peter van Geersdaele/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:49, 22 August 2019 (UTC)
Comments looks like this was hanging around for too long, and it's a subject close to my upbringing, so here we go...
- " the Sutton Hoo ship-burial." this is a WP:SEAOFBLUE.
- I agree it's not ideal, but the "Sutton Hoo ship-burial" is the standard name, and both links are relevant. This is the way it's linked in many articles that mention it.
- It's similar in the infobox (although it looks like you've piped "ship-burial" differently from the way you do it in the lead).
- Added a pipe.
- Could we put a "(pictured in 2018)" in that caption? Or are we not clear when the photo was taken?
- I don't know when it was taken. I've been meaning to send an email to his daughter, however, so will ask when I do so (she was the one who sent it to me).
- General structure: I think three paras in the lead is too long for an article of this size, perhaps two (see WP:LEAD for MOS guidance).
- Now only two paragraphs.
- I think the article has strong UK ties, so we should go with "fibreglass" really.
- Done.
- Again, per TIES, I would expect the British Museum to have referred to "Medieval" as "Mediaeval" (or even "Mediæval"), could you just double-check that?
- The article which is the source for that says
Authors' address: Department of Medieval and Later Antiquities, British Museum, London WC1B 3DG, Great Britain.
Happy to change it if we find a better source that says otherwise, though.
- The article which is the source for that says
- "Early life and education" not sure much of this is about "education" to be honest...
- It's a bit of a convention in the articles I've worked on (e.g., Nigel Williams (conservator) and Caroline Brady (philologist)), but there is at least a bit of education in this section school and Hammersmith Technical College, and his work at the Victoria and Albert Museum during that time).
- "and tried out with" would this be "had a trial with"? We don't really "try out" with football clubs in the UK.
- Done.
- "1954 to 1976 Peter van Geersdaele worked " no need to repeat his first name.
- Removed.
- "a process he replicated in October 1970 " perhaps could we use a different word from "replicated" as we're talking about "replicas" already...?
- Done:
a process he repeated in October 1970
- Done:
- "Anglo-Saxon Sutton Hoo ship-burial, " this is a triple-whammy SEAOFBLUE.
- Moved Anglo-Saxon to the next sentence.
- "two and a half decades " why not simply 26 years?
- Done.
- "fiberglass replica.[17][18]" you link "fiberglass" at this point...? (and apply the ENGVAR I'm recommending too if you agree).
- Moved the link to the first mention, and changed the spelling.
- " an estimated 6,100 kg (13,400 lb)" picky, but in 1970, did van Geersdaele really write about how much it weighed in kg first?
- Yep: "It measures 23•8 in length and 4•3 m at its widest point amidships, and the estimated weight was approximately 6100 kg (Fig. 1)."
- " twenty-five sections." 25 (you previously mentioned 85 sections, so consistent approach).
- Done.
- "in 1955,[1][34][1]" so good you ref'd [1] twice!
- Hah! Removed.
- I think instead of Woodbridge, Suffolk, we would normally just go with Woodbridge, Suffolk.
- Not a big deal, but I generally try to add the extra link.
- Council Tax is a formal thing, so you can capitalise it (and maybe link it).
- Done.
That's it for a quick pass, it's a nice neat article. I'll put the GAN on hold while we go through these minor issues. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:27, 22 August 2019 (UTC)
- Many thanks for the review, The Rambling Man, and sorry for not responding earlier. I think I've responded to all your points above. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:02, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
- No worries, happy with your updates and responses above, some of the points I raise aren't covered by the GA criteria anyway, so I'm happy to promote. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:14, 2 September 2019 (UTC)