Talk:Phil Harvey (band manager)/GA2
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: FuzzyMagma (talk · contribs) 17:54, 12 September 2023 (UTC)
I will review this FuzzyMagma (talk) 17:54, 12 September 2023 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- see comments below
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- half of the references are not acceptable, see details below
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
- C. It contains no original research:
- did not check due to quick fail
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- excessive use of quotation and additional large pink quotation!
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- did not check due to quick fail
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- did not check due to quick fail
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- did not check due to quick fail
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall: some of the comments from previous review was not address, e.g., "Twitter:
The couple have three children
" + the article is build on primary sources + there is also excessive use of quotation that does not serve any purpose = quick fail under 1 and 3- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Comments[edit]
lead[edit]
- degree at
the
University of Melbourne during this period
Early life[edit]
- unnecessary quotes, e.g., the line-up "never overlapped"
Management[edit]
- excessive quotes that mount to copyvio
- "manager again, but now assisted by", remove now
Creative direction[edit]
- excessive unnecessary quotes that mount to copyvio, e.g., He would "pop his head in the studio to give his opinion" occasionally,
Personal life[edit]
- "the manager travelled around South America", the manager is Harvey right? then write Harvey
Discography[edit]
- source?
See also[edit]
- remove, irrelevant per MOS:SEEALSO,
A "See also" section is a useful way to organize internal links to related or comparable articles and build the web.
this not this section
References[edit]
General
- excessive use of primary sources, as in interviews (ref 1 and 7), Coldplay Official Website (7 refs) and Coldplay twitter (twice)
- ref. 23 and 25 need to be reformatted
- Ref. 24 is a form, fails WP:RS
- Ref. 25 is a tweet with a screenshot for a primary source, fails RS
- Ref 26 is blog, fails RS
Spot checks
- Ref 1, failed
- Ref 20, failed
- Ref 21, failed
- Ref 22, failed
- Ref 23a, failed
- Ref 23b, failed
- Ref 23c, failed
- Ref 28, failed
Further reading[edit]
External links[edit]
- Per WP:LINKSTOAVOID, please remove irrelevant external links and templates as described below:
- Coldplay Official Website
- Coldplay on AllMusic
- template "Grammy Award for Record of the Year",
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.