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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 07:23, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Soon... Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:23, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for picking it up! (off-topic; your userspace inspired me to copy yours as mine was looking terrible). Pancake (talk) 12:03, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • a song by → a song recorded by
  • set comma after "second studio album"
  • Robin wrote → She wrote (word repetition)
  • helmed production → handled its production
  • 1999 with the → 1999, featuring the
  • influences and a "playful" vibe. → influences in its sound and has a "playful" vibe.
  • critical response → critical response from [[music journalism|music critics]]
 Done
  • top 40 → top forty
 Not done You shouldn't mix "forty" and "31" in the same sentence; also it is generally recommended to use numbers when higher than twelve (?) rather than spelling it out, if memory serves right. Pancake (talk) 09:03, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • remove "singles" from "singles chart"
  • the parent album → its parent album
  • set a comma after "international label"
 Done

Infobox

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  • nothing about the genre? This could be world music?! (But I understand you, on my latest GA, there also isn't a real genre.)
No genre. Pancake (talk) 09:03, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • it seems like "Good Thang" has a stand-alone article, so you should link it in the lead, as well.
Removed link from infobox; it's a redirect. Pancake (talk) 09:03, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Background and composition

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  • Set a comma after "the strings", as here another enumeration starts
  • In the first paragraphs, there are a few short sentences which could be combined to sound better instead of clipped.
  • what type of website is Aftonbladet?
  • it held a → it incorporated a
  • Its chorus → The recording's refrain
  • the "Play" single release → the single release of "Play"
  • Last two sentences should be mergered into the next section
 Done

Release and promotion

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  • set a comma after "second studio album"
  • add year of release to the lead single in brackets
  • "Play" was released → Subsequently, "Play" was made available for consumption (alternating words)
  • July 1999 by → July 1999 through
  • the single cover art → the accompanying cover artwork
  • "Good Thang".[8] The B-side → connect these two sentences with a semicolon (;)
  • parent album were not released → parent album were not distributed (you used "released" twice in a row)
  • RCA shelved the plans → the label cancelled plans
  • Add "on 21 May 1999" after "release party"
  • album tracks → material from the album
  • the marketing → the promotion ("marketing" sounds weird)
  • set comma after "following single" and add release year of "My Only Reason" in brackets.
 Done

Reception

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  • "Play" received positive reviews in the Swedish press → Upon its release, "Play" was acclaimed by Swedish [[music journalism|music critics]]
  • what type of website is Dagens Nyheter?
  • deemed it → deemed the recording (you used "it" already)
  • "obvious" hit → "obvious" success (you used "hit" already)
  • fared well → I would say "moderately"
  • singles chart → remove "singles"
  • number 34, before → remove comma
 Done
  • top 40 → top forty
 Not done Same as above. Pancake (talk) 09:03, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • but it failed → but failed
  • set a comma before "Electric"
  • number 6 → number six in that territory
  • falling off → leaving it
 Done

Track listings

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  • flawless

Credits and personnel

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  • liner notes of "Play" → liner notes of the singles's CD release
  • set a full stop after the opening two sentences from "Recording"
  • flawless
 Done

Release history

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  • Unlink formats and labels
 Done

Outcome

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 On hold for 7 days to allow fixes to the article. Good job! Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:37, 19 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

With my comments being resolved, I can now gladly pass this article. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 14:55, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.