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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 01:53, 1 April 2010 (UTC) Hi. I'll be reviewing this article as part of April's GAN Backlog Elimination Log. See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my review style. Address the below comments; meanwhile, I've placed the article on hold. The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 01:53, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

  • Does Ann have her own article? And if not, wikilink to the character's list?
  • "digs up dirt" — a bit slang-ish, wouldn't you say?
  • "an improvement over the previous week's episode, "Beauty Pageant.""
    • Got them all. I also added some other missing wikilinks... — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Plot[edit]

  • Again, "find any dirt": bit slangish. Same with the later uses of the word.
  • Replace the period after "problem" with a colon.
  • "he's" → "he is"
  • "awesome I am" → "how "awesome" she is."
  • I'm a bit confused: did Mark dig up dirt on himself or Jerry?
    • Done. Let me know if the Jerry thing still needs further clarity. — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Production[edit]

  • "features about" → "features approximately"

Cultural references[edit]

  • Quotes around "perfect ten"

Reception[edit]

  • Separate the ratings and the reviews.
  • Remove the second "together" in the IGN review

Images[edit]

  • One FU file (which is good) and one PD image (checks out)

Final say[edit]

Nice work! I'm going to go pass this. Congrats and happy editing. The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 19:05, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]