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Reviewer: The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 01:53, 1 April 2010 (UTC) Hi. I'll be reviewing this article as part of April's GAN Backlog Elimination Log. See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my review style. Address the below comments; meanwhile, I've placed the article on hold. The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 01:53, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
- Does Ann have her own article? And if not, wikilink to the character's list?
- "digs up dirt" — a bit slang-ish, wouldn't you say?
- "an improvement over the previous week's episode, "Beauty Pageant.""
- Got them all. I also added some other missing wikilinks... — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Plot[edit]
- Again, "find any dirt": bit slangish. Same with the later uses of the word.
- Replace the period after "problem" with a colon.
- "he's" → "he is"
- "awesome I am" → "how "awesome" she is."
- I'm a bit confused: did Mark dig up dirt on himself or Jerry?
- Done. Let me know if the Jerry thing still needs further clarity. — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Production[edit]
- "features about" → "features approximately"
- Done. — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Cultural references[edit]
- Quotes around "perfect ten"
- Done. — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Reception[edit]
- Separate the ratings and the reviews.
- Remove the second "together" in the IGN review
- Done. — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Images[edit]
- One FU file (which is good) and one PD image (checks out)
- Thanks! — Hunter Kahn 02:13, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Final say[edit]
Nice work! I'm going to go pass this. Congrats and happy editing. The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 19:05, 1 April 2010 (UTC)