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Reviewer: Visionholder (talk · contribs) 19:30, 5 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am claiming this review. I will try to start it within the next few days. – VisionHolder « talk » 19:30, 5 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Images

  • The first image on the page, File:Rainilaiarivony.jpg claims to be in the public domain due to age, but it does not list an artist, an original printed source, or original copyright. It only gives a website that hosts basic info about Rainilaiarivony.
  • File:KingOfMadagascar.jpg could also use better source information. In fact, I wouldn't be surprised is some free online digital libraries have a higher-resolution copy of the photo.
  • File:Rainilaiarivony funeral PS.jpg – The source points to the wrong picture, and once again the date needs to reflect the date the picture was taken (based on what the source says).

References

  • I'm not sure about the reliability of the web references, #11 and #14. The others look okay, though.
  • Okay, I can replace those (although I'm convinced the site is fine - he's pulling from the Tantara, the standard for 19th century Merina history, but I can just pull from that directly myself). Lemurbaby (talk) 04:48, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]


I will try to review the prose either tonight or tomorrow. Sorry for the delays. – VisionHolder « talk » 22:40, 8 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Review

  • "On 14 August, the day of the queen's death, Rainilaiarivony—now 33 years of age—possessed forethought and self-possession that would enable him to prevent needless loss of life." Can you re-word this to make it more easily understood? Alternatively, you may be able to drop the last half and join it to the next sentence.
  • No page (or even red-link) for Rainitsimbazafy?
  • The page numbers for the Fage, Flint & Oliver (1986) ref don't seem to match up with the online version you link to. Instead, those pages are about Africa, not Madagascar. Are the pages just wrong, or do you have the wrong edition?
  • Rather than re-typing the citation for the Cambridge History of Africa, I had copied it from another article I wrote - except the other article used the preceding volume (vol. 5), and this information came from vol. 6. I've fixed it now. Lemurbaby (talk) 17:55, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Looking at the other references from the same book, I have found other referencing problems. Although the core material is on the correct page (as cited), some of the information is not in the source. For example, the sentences that precede "When Jean Laborde died in 1878..." are only partially discussed by the source for that large block of text. It mentions Egypt and the missionaries, but not the military defeat and other fine details. – VisionHolder « talk » 17:21, 20 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Rainilairivony was described by a contemporary as a "Great orator among a nation of orators"[1] and was widely respected by Malagasy and foreigners alike." – These last two sentences of the lead are not found (from what I can tell/remember) in the body of the article. Also, the last bit is unreferenced. – VisionHolder « talk » 17:21, 20 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    Yes the orator quote isn't found elsewhere. I thought it worked best there. Do I have to move it elsewhere to get all the citations out of the lead? I've also reworded that last sentence to better reflect what's contained in the article. Let me know if you think it needs to change further. Lemurbaby (talk) 22:29, 22 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    The changes are perfect. The lead is only supposed to be a summary. Nothing should be there that isn't already mentioned and cited in the body. For that reason, the lead should not require citations... except in extreme cases where the material is highly controversial. I have never had a good reason to use a citation in the lead... and you can't get much more controversial than lemur taxonomy! – VisionHolder « talk » 05:05, 23 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, I can't really check the other references, but I'll WP:AGF. Other than that, the article is excellent. – VisionHolder « talk » 19:21, 14 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

query
  • Hi, as a person not familiar with the history of Madagascar, I'm wondering how the Prime Minister was chosen. It sort of sounds like the queen makes the selection, but it never actually says that. Plus if Rainilaiarivony had to work in conjunction with the queen to get rid of his brother, how does this work? MathewTownsend (talk) 15:59, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Originally the monarch had absolute power and selected his or her advisers and ministers, but after the coup led by Rainivoninahitriniony (Rainilaiarivony's brother, discussed in the article) the power was "shared" between the monarch and prime minister. But the successful coup leaders (who strangled the last king) made the offer to the former king's wife to become the sovereign queen if she would agree to the power share. So really the prime minister held the reigns - he offered the power to her, and she knew they could strangle her too if they weren't happy with her. So from that point forward the Prime Minister and his council effectively selected the queen, always from among the qualified candidates (i.e. those of royal descendence). Lemurbaby (talk) 17:55, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]


GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Closing note: Another great article. Only one small fix needed (for a FAC run), from what I can tell: the citations need to standardize on whether you ware going to use the full first name or just initials. Other than that, good job! – VisionHolder « talk » 23:44, 25 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]