Talk:Ralph Milne/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:41, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! Glad to review another nomination of yours. Will get to this shortly. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 07:41, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• We generally don't include citations in the lead. They go into the main text. All the facts of the lead should be present in the main text.
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• In total he made 285 appearances "He made a total of 285 appearances"?
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• a full senior cap Can this be wikilinked?
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• when writing his own autobiography If McLean writes an autobiography it can only be his own. So "own" is redundant.
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Club career

• Start the main text with the person's full name
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• superior academic progress "superior" could be better reworded as "remarkable".
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• "Striker" could be linked
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Dundee United

• This section is very long. Please divide this into subsections
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• Link Dundee United, equaliser, matchday squad, hamstring
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• Aged 18 he scored his first goal --> He scored his first goal at the age of 18
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• in the UEFA Cup. Add the citation at the end
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Charlton Athletic

• "Charlton Athletic" is a duplicate link
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Bristol City

• The 1987–88 link is a duplink
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Manchester United

• Duplinks: First Division, Nottingham Forest, Old Trafford
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• Milne remained on United's payroll until 30 June 1991, when he was released. Source?
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

International career

• Milne made his debut Would be good to put his age explicitly here.
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Style of play

• Another former Dundee United teammate, Davie Dodds You should have mentioned that Hegarty was a former Dundee United teammate, and used "another teammate" for Dodds.
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Personal life

• Can we have the full names and possibly some idea about the background of his wives?
  • No background information exists for his wives I don't think, but I added a sentence for his last long term girlfriend. His two sons issued a notice of thanks to Dundee United following Milne's death, but I imagine his former wives might not want to be described in his Wikipedia article anyway, with him being such a difficult partner and all.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• Duplink: Jim McLean
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
• He died Say "Milne died", lest "he" be confused with McLean
  • Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

That should be all. Good luck! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 09:37, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Update: A bit busy now, I think I will be able to get to this only by the end of this week. Cheers! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 18:42, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

OK, thanks for the suggestions.--EchetusXe 15:13, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you. I notice no more issues in the article. Glad to promote this. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 15:51, 28 March 2016 (UTC)