Talk:Randy Ambrosie

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Review: November 17, 2017. (Reviewed version).

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A fact from Randy Ambrosie appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 20 March 2017 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Canadian Football League player Randy Ambrosie helped oversee the league's expansion into the United States?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2017/March. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Randy Ambrosie.

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Randy Ambrosie/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:04, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It's me again! Taking on this review. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Infobox

Multiple facts in the infobox are unsourced, like the DOB, POB, height, and weight

I think these come from the The Canadian Pro Football Encyclopedia, @BU Rob13: WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 21:44, 16 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, the entire infobox in all of my Canadian football biographies are sourced to the CPFE. ~ Rob₁₃^Talk 22:06, 16 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Early career

"In 1984, he was named an All-Canadian." - maybe you could explain what an All-Canadian is to non-football experts like myself Done
"By February 1985, he was considered likely to be selected in the first round of the 1985 CFL Draft." - if there anything to say whom Ambrosie was likely to be selected for the first round of the 85 draft? Done

Calgary Stampeders

Wikilink Calgary Stampeders since it is the first time it is mentioned in the main body of the prose Done
I'm guessing that rookie of the year is the CFL's Most Outstanding Rookie Award? If so please added a wikilink Done

Toronto Argonauts

Added a wikilink to Toronto Argonauts and right guard Done
"The continued injury issues didn't affect the offensive line's success on the field," - no contractions please Done

Edmonton Eskimos

"The Argonauts had not originally planned to trade Ambrosie, but Ambrosie requested to be traded to a team closer to where his wife worked." - reptition of Ambrosie Done
"The Eskimos met the Stampeders in the West Final for the fourth season in the row" - reword to The Eskimos met the Stapeders in the West Final for the fourth consecutive season Done

Adminstrative roles

"On June 29, 2017, Ambrosie was named to be the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge." - should be reworded toOn June 29, 2017 Ambrosie was name the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge. Done
"The move was made official on July 4." - perhaphs this could be reworded to say The move was made offical five days later. Done

I slightly changed this section of the article. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:10, 16 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The change looks fine and thanks for correcting a factual error that I overlooked. MWright96 (talk) 11:14, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

References

References 39, 40 and 46 are bare urls Done

Going to place this review on hold until everything has been dealt with. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'm helping Rob with his reviews, so I'll get to this if he doesn't. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 10:43, 16 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: Thank you for taking on the review for Rob. Am more than happy to make this article a GA. MWright96 (talk) 11:14, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]