Talk:Raymond (Animal Crossing)

GA Review

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Nominator: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 16:51, 12 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 12:17, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 12:17, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

@Cukie Gherkin Here are my comments, hope they can be addressed! Arconning (talk) 14:51, 7 July 2024 (UTC)

Prose and MoS

• Mentions of "amiibo" should be written as "Amiibo". Even if it's stylized as all lowercase, it should be written as the latter as it's a proper noun. Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Capital letters#Trademarks
• Wikilink mentions of LGBT community to LGBT community.

Lead and infobox

• New Horizons and subsequently, New Horizons and be subsequently
• He also appears in the manga adaptation of New Horizons,, remove comma.
• his personality, appearance, and his willingness, remove the second his.
• currency and items, as well as real money., remove comma.
• him popular in the LGBT community., him popular with the LGBT community.
• His popularity also led to backlash from people over the strong attachment., the strong attachment of what?

Concept and creation

• No issues.

Appearances

• Raymond first appeared in the 2020 Animal Crossing: New Horizons, Raymond first appeared in 2020 in Animal Crossing: New Horizons.
• can be a resident, suggest rewording as can be residents.
• or having him, add by after or.
• the player can interact with Raymond by talking to him, giving gifts, and more., instead of using more use a wording such as the player can interact with Raymond using actions such as talking to him, gifting gifts, and ...[another action]. Could put at least three examples rather than letting the reader guess using "more".

  I've elected to just leave it at these two, as there really isn't a third thing that is nearly comparable to the other two in terms of significance in the game. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 00:44, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

Reception and promotion

• identified as a standout member, add he was at the start.
• Mentions of Tumblr Sexymen and Tumblr Sexyman, should have the second word uncapitalized.
• Wikilink mention of the word "bisexual", "NME", and "Photoshop".

Images

• Images have fair-use licenses which makes sense. Pass.

Refs

• Earwig seems okay.
• Random reference checks: Refs 1, 2, 8, 12, 16, 23, and 26, good. Conditional pass on the Screen Rant source, as it's used sparingly.

Misc

• No ongoing edit war, broad and focused information (especially the last section), neutral.

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I believe I have addressed all issues. How's it look now? - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 00:45, 8 July 2024 (UTC)