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GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:56, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Going to be reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 20:56, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

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  • Wikilink Vice President of the United States


  • "He did a sculpture of Milwaukee's first white settler and first mayor. He also created sculptures for the Chicago World's Fair of 1893." - consider merging these two sentences together


Life and career

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  • "Park was born February 17, 1838," - born on February


  • "working as an assistant to Palmer[3] alongside other future sculptors Launt Thompson[4] and Charles Calverley.[5]" - commas will be need to be added before each of the citations


  • "He moved to New York city to establish an independent career before moving to Florence, Italy around 1871." - the word in bold begins with a capital letter



  • "Park's early work was in marble, later changing to the medium of bronze for natural sculptures, in line with the American trend for late nineteenth century sculptures." - sentence will need to be verified by a reliable source
  •  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]







  • "It has been suggested that Park's most enduring legacy may be his role as mentor and teacher to Lawrie." - suggested by whom?


  • "He is best known for his Actor's Monument to Edgar Allan Poe (1884) in the Metropolitan Museum of Art in New York city, and the Drake Fountain in Chicago (1892)." - sentence will require a reliable source to verify that it is correct


  • Also for the above sentence, the parentheses can be removed and the sentence be reworded accordingly


  • "Dimmick's view is confirmed by his obituary in the Chicago Tribune dated November 8, 1902, which states he died "at the "Battle Creek sanitarium." - sentence needs to be verified by a reliable source


  • Chicago Tribune can be wikilinked

Washington monument, 1885

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  • "at a cost of around $20,000[23]" - a comma is missing before the citation


  • "restorer Andrzej Dajnowski discovered major cracking in one of the legs " - what caused the cracking?

Juneau Monument, 1887

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  • "having been the area's first white settler and the first Mayor of the city." - the city's first Mayor.


  • "The monument cost around $25,000 (equivalent to $641,000 in 2019)[24]" - a comma is missing before the citation


  • "and depicts Juneau "clothed in the habit of the pioneer"[32]" - same issue as above


  • "Strong similarities have been noted between the sculpture's visage and that of Park's Washington statue." - noted by whom?

References

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  • The hyphens in the number sections of References 3, 4, 5, 6 and 20 should be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH

Newspaper and web

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  • askArt ""Richard Park (1832-1902)"" - the hyphen needs to be replaced by an en dash


  • Be consistent in how Milwaukee Journal Sentinel is written; it should be either Milwaukee Journal Sentinel or The Milwaukee Journal Sentinel


Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 08:08, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]